Unit 3 Revise and Edit Test Talk

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 3?

• Maggie would sit and listen to the sound of the waves when she missed him by the shore.

• When Maggie missed him, she would sit by the shore she would listen to the sound of the waves.

• Maggie would sit, and she would listen to the sound of the waves by the shore when she missed him.

• When Maggie missed him, she would sit by the shore and listen to the sound of the waves.

Deena would like to add some details to strengthen her third paragraph (sentences 9–10). Which of the following can BEST be added after sentence 10 to accomplish this goal?

• Maggie learned how to light the lamp, trim the wick, and fetch the oil needed in order to keep the light burning all night long.

• His job was exciting and adventurous, and there were many interesting things for Maggie to learn while she was there.

• In that day and age, there was no one else to assist Captain Frank with the job that he had loved so much for so long.

• Being a lighthouse keeper was hard work, and although Maggie wasn’t all that interested, she listened anyway.

In sentence 20, Deena did not use the most appropriate word to describe Maggie’s knocks.

Which of the following is the best replacement for the word crazy?

• foolish

• outrageous

• frantic

• haphazard

Deena wants to improve the transition between the fifth paragraph (sentences 19–24) and

the sixth paragraph (sentences 25–28). Which of the following could BEST replace sentence

25 and help accomplish this goal?

• Maggie knew exactly what to do because she had been watching and listening to Captain

  Frank for years.

• To start with, Maggie was frightened and wasn’t quite sure what would be expected of her.

• After years of watching Captain Frank, Maggie knew that he would want her to wait for

  instructions.

• Maggie wanted to take the lead in this situation, so she did it without questioning the

  weather.

Deena wants to use a more effective and descriptive sentence to close the sixth paragraph

(sentences 25–28). Which of the following could BEST replace sentence 28 and help

accomplish this goal?

• In seconds, the lighthouse and its occupants were all in a much better position.

• In seconds, she would ask Captain Frank for help with what she needed to do.

• In seconds, the light was on, and everything was fine in their part of the world.

• In seconds, a warm glow filled the lighthouse and beamed out its many windows.

What changes need to be made in sentence (3)?

• Change the comma after him to a semicolon

• Change too into to

• Capitalize She

• Change shore to sure

What changes should be made to sentence (15)?

• Lowercase But

• Change freindly to friendly

• There is no change

• Change through to threw