STAAR Revise & Editing

E2.9(B) (i)

Four Days Is Enough

Which of these sentences should Nancy add at the beginning of the second paragraph (sentences 7-15) to serve as the most effective position statement for her essay?

• I think I would like the four day school week because I would enjoy the extra time to rest on the weekend.

• The four-day school week is a great idea for all students and parents, and even the school district would likely benefit.

• We spend way too much time during the week in school, and it would e nice to have a three-day weekend for a part-time job to just relax.

• The four-day school week provides benefits that would help the students, teachers, and schools in our district.

E2.9 (B) (ii)

Four Days Is Enough

Which sentence in the fourth paragraph (sentences 22-30) is extraneous and should e deleted?

• Sentence 27

• Sentence 28

• Sentence 29

• Sentence 30

E2.9 (C)

Four Days Is Enough

Nancy has not used the most effective word in sentence 4. Which word should replace have to create a more effective sentence?

• Carry

• Accept

• Manage

• Enroll

E2.9 (B) (ii)

Four Days Is Enough

Nancy is concerned that she has included a redundant sentence in the fifth paragraph (sentences 31-35). Which sentence should e deleted from the paragraph?

• Sentence 32

• Sentence 33

• Sentence 34

• Sentence 35

E2.9 (B) (i)

A New Discovery About the Brain

Reese needs to improve the introduction of his essay. Which sentence should e added before sentence 1 to create a more effective introduction for is essay?

• There are many mysteries about the human body that would you would never believe it.

• The rain is like the body's big jigsaw puzzle.

• Over the past centuries, many of the mysteries of the human body have been explained by science.

• Scientist are determined to find out all the facts that can help them understand our world.

E2.9 (B) (i)

A New Discovery About the Brain

Reese is considering adding this idea (below) to his second paragraph (sentences 4-8)

The circulatory system moves blood rich with nutrients and oxygen to all the differnt parts of the body.

Where should Reese insert this idea?

• After sentence 4

• After sentence 5

• After sentence 6

• Reese should not insert this idea.

E2.9 (B) (i)

A New Discovery About the Brain

Reese needs a better transition between the second paragraph (sentences 4-8) and the third paragraph (sentences 9-14). Which sentence should replace sentence 9 to create a more effective transition?

• Until recently, scientists could not determine how the brain is able to rid itself of waste because the lymphatic system does not include the brain.

• Scientists researched the brain for years before finally making a breakthrough.

• No one knew how the rain was able to perform some functions.

• The lymphatic system does not include the brain, so everyone always wondered about that.

E2.9 (C)

A New Discovery About the Brain

Reese wants to improve the clarity of sentence 12. How should sentence 12 be revised?

• Running along the brain's blood vessels, the team determined is a fluid that carries waste away from the brain.

• The team determined that fluid running along the brain's blood vessels carries waste away from the brain.

• Waste by a fluid that is running along the brain's blood vessels is carried away from the brain, the team determined.

• Along the side of the brain's blood vessels is a fluid, the team determined, and this carries away from the brain waste.

E2.9 (B) (ii)

A New Discovery About the Brain

Which sentence should Reese add after sentence 18 to provide additional support for the inference in sentence 19?

• It would be a good idea to get rid of these bad proteins.

• Another type of protein is important to building strong muscles.

• Alzheimer's is a disease that is heavily researched.

• Some of these same proteins appear in the waste products of brain cells.