MUG 9 - Wordiness & Redundancy - Review

______ voice = the subject is doing something

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CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.8.1B

CCSS.L.8.1D

CCSS.L.8.3A

Which version is best?

• The tree's branches swayed in the wind, and it's leaves rustled endlessly.

• The trees branches swayed in the wind, and its leaves rustled endlessly.

• The tree's branches swayed in the wind, and leaves were rustling endlessly.

• The tree's branches swayed in the wind, and its leaves rustled endlessly.

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CCSS.L.3.1E

CCSS.L.4.1B

CCSS.L.5.1.B-D

CCSS.L.5.1C

CCSS.L.5.1D

Identify the clearest, most concise sentence

• The store offers complimentary gift wrapping at no charge to its customers.

• Thankfully, the store says that they offer complimentary gift wrapping at no charge to its customers.

• The store offers complimentary gift wrapping to its customers.

• The store offers gift wrapping at no charge to its customers.

Identify the voice of the following sentence:

The ball was thrown to me.

• Active

• Passive

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CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.8.1B

CCSS.L.8.1D

CCSS.L.8.3A

Choose the best answer.

• Amanda invited all of the girls Courtney, Allyson, Anna, Jamie, and Nong.

• Amanda invited all of the girls: Courtney, Allyson, Anna, Jamie, and Nong.

• Amanda invited all of the girls, Courtney, Allyson, Anna, Jamie, and Nong.

• Amanda invited all of the girls Courtney, Allyson, Anna, Jamie, and Nong.

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CCSS.L.9-10.2B

Click all of the following that you should trim from a sentence to reduce wordiness and redundancy.

• "It is"

• "There are"

• "That"

• "a, an, and the"

Identify the voice of the following sentence:

The building was renovated in 2021.

• Active

• Passive

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CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.8.1B

CCSS.L.8.1D

CCSS.L.8.3A

Choose the best answer.

• Mrs. McMillen thought she had made it clear, but the students were still confused.

• Mrs. McMillen thought she made it clear, however, the students were confused.

• Mrs. McMillen thought that she had made it clear, and the students were still confused.

• Mrs. McMillen thought she made it clear, the students were confused.

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CCSS.L.4.1B

CCSS.L.5.1.B-D

CCSS.L.5.1B

CCSS.L.5.1C

CCSS.L.5.1D

She worked for thirty years as a teacher and librarian in the field of education in Baltimore public schools.

Which of the following words or phrases from the preceding sentence is LEAST necessary and could therefore be deleted?

• thirty

• and librarian

• in the field of education

• Baltimore public

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CCSS.L.3.1A

Choose the best answer.

• I cannot wait until President's Day, finally, we have a day off.

• I cannot wait until President’s Day. Finally, we have a day off

• I cannot wait until President's Day for we have a day off.

• I cannot wait until President's Day, when we have a day off.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A