editing and sentence combining

What is the best change we can make to this sentence: 

When I opened my present I let out a yell.

• Delete When
• Change I to we
• Change I let out to and yell out
• Insert a comma after present.

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CCSS.RI.11-12.4

CCSS.RI.7.4

CCSS.RI.8.4

CCSS.RI.9-10.4

CCSS.RI.9-10.4

Which answer shows the correct way to write the sentence?

• Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the the surface. And have a big mess to clean up.
• Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface then we would have a big mess to clean up.
• Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface, and we would have a big mess to clean up.
• Otherwise, the pancakes would stick to the surface, we would have a big mess to clean up then.

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CCSS.L.2.4D

Choose the correct sentence.

• For the rest of the day, neither of us spoke, and it was obvious. That she was no happier about the arrangements than I was.

• For the rest of the day, neither of us spoke it was obvious that she was no happier about the arrangements than I was.

• For the rest of the day, neither of us spoke. Which made it obvious that she was no happier about the arrangement than I was.

• For the rest of the day, neither of us spoke. It was obvious that she was no happier about the arrangements than I was.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 14?

(14) And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina and won four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way, which helped her team.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, which helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

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CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 12 and 13?

(12) Amy Cuddy did a study on how “power poses” affect people. (13) She is a social psychologist at Harvard University.

• Amy Cuddy did a study on how “power poses” affect people she is a social psychologist at Harvard University.

• Amy Cuddy did a study on how “power poses” affect people, a social psychologist at Harvard University.

• Amy Cuddy, a social psychologist at Harvard University, did a study on how “power poses” affect people.

• Amy Cuddy did a study, at Harvard University and with a social psychologist, on how “power poses” affect people.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

(9) Approximately seventy percent of today’s teenagers communicate within online social networks, according to the Pew Research Center. (10) A survey of almost 7,000 teens was conducted in 2014 by three Swiss researchers, and they found that many of the surveyed teens believed they were spending too much time on these social networking sites.(11) Additionally, these teens admitted that they miss spending time with real people. (12) Perhaps these teens are discovering what they have been suggesting for a while: spending time with others in real life is important.

How can Susan improve the clarity (make more clear/specific) of sentence 12?

• Change these teens to they

• Change they to researchers

• Change suggesting to saying

• Change a while to some time

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CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.6.1A

CCSS.L.6.1C

CCSS.L.6.1D

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 6 and 7?

(6) My own sister attends one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school. (7) She is having a hard time in math.

• My own sister is having a hard time in math attending one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school.

• My own sister attends one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school although she is having a hard time in math.

• My own sister, who attends one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school, is having a hard time in math.

• My own sister attends one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school, she is having a hard time in math.

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CCSS.L.6.2A

CCSS.L.7.1A

CCSS.L.9-10.1B

(11) Evidence also suggests that the way you hold the rest of your body can affect how you feel. (12) Amy Cuddy did a study on how “power poses” affect people. (13) She is a social psychologist at Harvard University. (14) A power pose is a way of holding your body that suggests you’re in control of a situation.

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 12 and 13? (Watch out for run-ons and comma splices. Read slowly and check the flow of the sentences.)

• Amy Cuddy did a study on how “power poses” affect people she is a social psychologist at Harvard University.

• Amy Cuddy did a study on how “power poses” affect people, a social psychologist at Harvard University.

• Amy Cuddy, a social psychologist at Harvard University, did a study on how “power poses” affect people.

• Amy Cuddy did a study, at Harvard University and with a social psychologist, on how “power poses” affect people.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

(23) The fascinating city of Coober Pedy has become a popular destination for both tourists and filmmakers. (24) The citizens of Coober Pedy have certainly found a creative way to beat the heat, and the world has taken notice.

Which of these ideas could best follow and support sentence 23? (Pick the sentence that supports what sentence 23 is saying)

• Coober Pedy residents now make their livelihood in both the tourism industry and opal-mining industry, and this keeps most of the people working and able to provide for their families.

• Today the people in this town get the vast majority of their water from under ground from a source 24 kilometers away that has to be pumped in via an underground pipeline.

• More than 150,000 people visit the small town each year, and a host of movies, including Kangaroo Jack, Mad Max Beyond Thunderdome, and Opal Dream, have been filmed there.

• Since February of 1915, many of the highest-quality opals in the entire world have been found in Coober Pedy; in fact, Coober Pedy is sometimes even referred to as the opal capital of the world.

He was learning how to solve equations. He found a trick that would make it easier.
 
What is the most effective way to combine the 2 sentences? 

• While learning how to solve equations, he found a trick that would make it easier.
• He was learning how to solve equations because he found a trick that would make it easier.
• While learning how to solve equations, a trick that he figured out made it easier.
• He was learning to solves the equations, then, he found a trick that would make it easier. 

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CCSS.RF.3.3B

CCSS.RF.3.3C

CCSS.RF.3.3D

CCSS.RF.4.3A

CCSS.RF.5.3A