The Big Change

What is the BEST revision to make in sentence 6?

• Noah’s new little pets are what seemed to be mostly eyes and tails on this first day.

• On this first day, Noah’s new little pets seemed to be mostly eyes and tails.

• The new little pets seemed to be mostly eyes and tails for Noah on this first day.

• On this first day, it seemed to be mostly eyes and tails of Noah’s new little pets.

Claire has included a sentence that does not belong in the third paragraph (sentences 8–13). Which sentence should she remove?

• Sentence 8

• Sentence 9

• Sentence 10

• Sentence 11

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 21?

• Small bulges puffed out but on each tadpole’s head and on the sides.

• Small bulges of each tadpole’s head puffed out so on the sides.

• Small bulges or the sides they puffed out of each tadpole’s head.

• No change is needed.

Claire wants a more effective transition between the sixth paragraph (sentences 26–29) and the last paragraph (sentences 30–33). Select the ONE correct phrase that should replace After that in sentence 30 to improve this transition.

• Because of his situation

• As his friends hopped away

• While he was thinking

• When the day was over