Revising & Editing #3

What change if any, should be made in sentence 1?

• Change tons to ton's

• Insert a comma after Lakes

• Change sailed to sailing

• Make no change

Tags

CCSS.L.4.2B

CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.5.2B

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 2 to convey a more somber tone?

• Seventeen years later, the hefty ship would sink in Lake Superior.

• Seventeen short years later, the ship would sink in Lake Superior.

• Seventeen productive years later, the ship would sink in Lake Superior.

• Seventeen years later, the doomed ship would sink in Lake Superior.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 3?

• Delete the comma after departed.

• Change 9th to Ninth

• Delete the comma after Wisconsin

• Make no change

Tags

CCSS.L.2.2B

CCSS.L.3.2B

CCSS.L.3.2C

CCSS.L.4.2B

CCSS.L.6.2A

Which transition word or phrase should be added to the beginning of sentence 4?

• As a result,

• In short,

• Shortly afterwards,

• Therefore,

Tags

CCSS.L.1.1G

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1A

CCSS.L.5.1E

Which vivid verb should replace the verb in sentence 6?

• Crashed

• Seeped

• Swayed

• Washed

What is the most effective way to revise the underlined portion of sentence 7 to convey a more somber tone?

• all 29 crew members were tragically lost

• all 29 crew members were unfortunately lost

• all 29 crew members were suddenly lost

• all 29 crew members were definitely lost

Tags

CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.3.1G

What is the most effective way to improve the organization of the paragraph?

• Delete sentence 5

• Switch sentences 5 and 6

• Delete sentence 7

• Move sentence 8 to the end of the paragraph

Tags

CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2