Rockin' Review-Editing and Revising

What is the best way to combine sentences 11 and 12?

• Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair, so it still has the same goal.

• Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair, it still has the same goal.

• Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair, but it still has the same goal.

• Today the Acton Children’s Business Fair is much larger than the first fair, or it still has the same goal.

Which transition BEST replaces "most importantly" at the beginning of sentence 15?

• instead

• In addition

• In other words

• Finally

What is the MOST effective revision to make in sentence 22?

• At this booth, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime, she had made it   by herself with no help from her parents.

• At this booth, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime that she had made  by herself.

• With no help from her parents, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime  that she had made by herself at this booth.

• With no help from her parents, fourth grader Hannah Nguyen sold slime at  the booth that she made by herself.

Julie needs a more clearly stated central idea. Which sentence BEST replaces sentence 4 to improve the central idea of her paper?

• It is a place where anything can happen as long as the kids are excited    about their ideas.

• It is a place where young people can sell things to other people who  attend the fair.

• It is a place where parents can enjoy watching their children learn about business.

• It is a place where young people who run their own businesses can make money by selling their products or services.

Julie wants to use a more specific word than made in sentence 24. Which word BEST replaces this word?

• got

• had

• earned

• created

What change should be made to sentence 2?

• Change thought to thinks

• Change him to himself

• Change is to are

• Delete the period after enough

What change should be made in sentence 4?

• Change finded to found

• Change would be to had been

• Change his to their

• Change favorite to more favorite

Whata change should be made in sentence 6?

• Change suddenly to sudden

• Change had to have

• Change bright to brightly

• Change ideas to idea

What change should be made in sentence 3?

• Change card to cards

• Change he to his

• Change the period to a question mark

• Change looked to saw

What change should be made to sentence 5?

• Change speshal to special

• Change someone to some one

• Insert a comma after nothing

• Delete the word enough