Revise & Editing: Is Human Experimentation Legal?

1. Sentence 5 does not effectively open the second paragraph (sentences 5-7). Which of the following can be placed before sentence 5 to help strengthen the second paragraph?

• A There are many reasons why Mengele’s experimentations were wrong, but three main reasons stand out.
• B Here is a list of the three reasons why I believe Mengele’s experiments were wrong.
• C Mengele should not have been allowed to

2. Victoria has a weak thesis statement for her paper. Which of the following can replace sentence 4 and serve as a more effective thesis for this paper?

• A Josef Mengele should be locked up and punished for his cruel experimentation on twins.
• B It was unethical for Josef Mengele to conduct his Twin Studies.
• C Josef Mengele’s cruel and inhumane experimentation on twins is both unethical and against the law.
• D In today’s modern society, doctors, such as Josef Mengele, are not allowed to do experimentation on twins.

3. The author wants to add the following sentence to the first paragraph (sentences 1-4). This cruelty is real to a survivor who said, “we are the children without a childhood because when we look back at our wonder years, we remember the huge chimneys, the smell of burned flesh, the shots, the blood taking, the endless tests in Mengele’s labs, the rats, lice, and dead bodies that were everywhere.” Where is the best place to insert the sentence?

• A After sentence 1
• B After sentence 2
• C After sentence 3
• D After sentence 4

4. Which of these ideas could best follow and support sentence 22?

• A The conditions of transfer were very harsh, as the children did not receive food or water for many days.
• B Between 1940 and 1945, according to official Polish estimates, approximately 200,000 Polish children were abducted by the Nazis.
• C It was a terrible sight: the agony of the mothers and fathers, the beating by the Germans, and the crying of the children.

1. Victoria has not used the most effective transition in sentence 27. Which of the following should replace Also in this sentence?

• A Besides
• B Otherwise
• C Next
• D Moreover

2. How should sentence 8 be revised?

• A The laws in the medical field would have prevented Mengele from performing his studies on the twins.

• B Having laws, like the laws today, would prevent Mengele from performing his studies on twins.

• C The current medical laws of today would have prevented Mengele from performing his studies on the twins.

3. Victoria has not used the most appropriate word in sentence 20. Which word best replaces flowing?

• A surging
• B large
• C rushing
• D rolling

4. What is the most effective revision of sentence 31?

• A To sum up, it is not ethical for Josef Mengele to do the Twin Studies today because of the required oaths that must be signed to prevent harm to patients. Consent is needed in order to experiment on humans. Lastly, people don't believe that the experiments Mengele did are ethical.
• B In conclusion, Josef Mengele’s experiments are not legal by today’s standards because oaths must be signed to prevent harm to the patients, consent is needed for experimentation on humans, and his reasons for testing were not ethical.
• C Finally, Josef Mengele was not ethical by today’s standards because an oath must be signed to prevent the harm that could become of the patients. Also, consent is needed in order for further experimentations on humans, and lastly people don't believe that the experiments Mengele did are ethical.

1. What is the best way to rewrite sentence 11?

• A If Mengele were to become a doctor in this day and age, he would not be allowed to do anything harmful without having further punishments, such as going to jail.
• B If Mengele were to become a doctor in this day, and age he would not be allowed to do anything harmful, without having further punishments such as going to jail.
• C If Mengele were to become a doctor in this day and age, he would not be allowed to do anything harmful. Without having further punishments, such as going to jail.

2. What is the correct way to write sentence 18?

• A Consent is needed in order to perform any act of research. This includes human subjects, which Mengele did not receive, from any of his subjects.
• B Consent is needed in order to perform any act of research, including human subjects, which Mengele did not receive from any of his subjects.
• C Consent is needed in order to perform any act of research, including human subjects. Mengele did not receive consent from any of his subjects.
• D Consent is needed in order to perform any act of research including human subjects; Mengele did not receive from any of his subjects.