Sergeant Stubby Revision and Editing

1 In sentence 5, Nick has not offered a strong controlling idea, or thesis statement. Which revision of sentence 5 creates the most effective thesis for this paper?

• More interesting, however, is why everything about the scraggly little dog was stubby.

• More interesting, however, is that Stubby was both unusual and popular during World

  War I.

• More interesting, however, is how this little dog earned the rank of U.S. Army sergeant and became a war hero.

• More interesting, however, is how Stubby was able to keep the name for so very long.

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CCSS.RI.6.2

CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.W.6.2B

2  What is the most effective way to combine sentences 11 and 12?

• While training on a Connecticut field, Conroy found a stray dog that won his heart.

• He was training on a Connecticut field because he found a stray dog that won his heart.

• Training on a Connecticut field, a stray dog that he found won Conroy’s heart.

• He was training on a Connecticut field, there, Conroy found a stray dog that won his heart.

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CCSS.W.6.2C

CCSS.W.6.3C

3 What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 17 and replace the word Plus. Choose the correct answer from the drop-down menu.

(17) And, he became an unofficial member of Conroy’s unit, the 102nd Infantry.  ​ (a)  

• Eventually
• Also,
• In the beginning,
• And,

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CCSS.W.6.2C

CCSS.W.6.3C

4  Sentence 25 lacks clarity. What is the most effective change to make to improve the clarity of this sentence?

• Change recognize to know

• Change the German  language to it

• Change him to a German spy

• Change the man’s  to his

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CCSS.L.6.1D

CCSS.W.6.2D