Revise & Edit Review

Gabby would like to add a more effective controlling idea.

Which sentence should replace sentence 3 to serve as a more effective controlling idea for her paper?

• A. People should pay more attention to eating with the proper forks, knives, and spoons at mealtime.

• B. The following details provide the information about how forks, spoons, and knives are used around the world.

• C. Yet, the story of how modern-day forks, spoons, and knives developed is an interesting journey through time.

• D. However, most people have no idea that forks, spoons, and knives have been in existence for thousands of years.

Gabby has not used the MOST effective word in sentence 8. Which word should replace stuff in this sentence?

• A. materials

• B. parts

• C. units

• D. pieces

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 13 and 14?

• A. Forks during the Middle Ages were smaller, they became more widely used for eating, but not everyone liked the idea of using forks.

• B. Forks during the Middle Ages, which were smaller and more widely used for eating,though everyone did not like the idea of using them.

• C. During the Middle Ages, forks were smaller and more widely used for eating, and everyone did not like the idea of using forks, though.

• D. During the Middle Ages, forks were smaller and became more widely used for eating,but not everyone liked the idea of using them.

What is the MOST effective way to revise sentence 24?

• A Utensils have changed over time and still changing to meet modern needs.

• B Utensils having changed over time, there are still changes to meet modern needs.

• C Utensils have changed over time and are still changing to meet modern needs.

• D Utensils have changed over time, which are still changing to meet modern needs.

Gabby wants to add a transition at the beginning of sentence 20 to improve the connection to the previous sentence.

Which transition should Gabby add to the beginning of sentence 20?

• A For this reason,

• B In other words,

• C In any case,

• D At the same time,

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 3?

• F. Change violin to Violin

• G. Insert a comma after boring

• H. Change disagree to disagreeing

• J. No change is needed.

What is the correct way to write sentences 7 and 8?

• F. All of the effort you invest in developing your skills is worth it. When you perform on stage

  before an appreciative crowd.

• G. All of the effort you invest in developing your skills is worth it when you perform on stage

  before an appreciative crowd.

• H. All of the effort, you invest in developing your skills. Is worth it when you perform on

  stage before an appreciative crowd.

• J. All of the effort you invest, in developing your skills is worth it when you perform on stage

  before an appreciative crowd.

What change should be made in sentence 5?

• A. Change Friendships to Freindships

• B. Change as to until

• C. Change rehearse to will rehearse

• D. Change you’re to your