LANC1120 Practice essay editing

The second reason that made Hans vulnerable to being exploiting is his background and personality. (Word form) Habiba

• The second reason that made Hans vulnerable to being exploitation is his background and personality.

• The second reason that made Hans vulnerable to being exploited is his background and personality.

• The second reason that makes Hans vulnerable to being exploited is his background and personality.

• The second reason that make Hans Vulnerable to being exploited is his background and personlity

The story The Devoted Friend written by Oscar Wilde, talks about two characters . (punctuation) Habiba

• The story 'The Devoted Friend' written by Oscar Wilde, talks about two characters .

• The story The Devoted Friend, written by Oscar Wilde, talks about two characters.

Even when the Miller's young son said that he want to call Hans to their house, he shouts at him and says "What a silly boy you are." Ghyaida.

• Even when the Miller's young son says that he wants to call Hans to their house, he shouts at him and says "What a silly boy you are." Ghyaida.

• When the Miller's young son said that he wanted to call Hans to their house, he shouted at him and said "What a silly boy you are." Ghyaida

• Even when the Miller's young son says that he want to call Hans to their house, he shouted at him and says "What a silly boy you are." Ghyaida.

The neighbors thought it strange that although the miller is rich, he never helped his poor friend and didn't gave him anything in return. Ghaida

• The neighbors thought it was strange that although the miller was rich, he never helped his poor friend and didn't give him anything in return.

• The neighbors thought it is strange that although the miller is rich, he never helps his poor friend and doesn't gave him anything in return.

• The neighbors think that it is strange that although the miller is rich, he never helps his poor friend and does not give him anything in return.

On the other side, the little Hans in the winter was extremally lonely and he expected the Miller who describe his as his friend came to visit him but the Miller never come. (Zainab)

• On the other hand, little Hans in the winter was extremally lonely and he expected the Miller who describes him as his friend comes to visit him but the Miller never comes.

• On the other hand, during the winter, little Hans was extremally lonely, and he expected the Miller who describes him as his friend comes to visit him but the Miller never comes.

• On the other hand, during the winter, little Hans was extremally lonely, and he expected the Miller, who described himself as his friend, to come to visit him but failed to do so.

To start with exploitation friendship (Zainab)

• fragment

• punctuation

• Fragment + punctuation

On the other side, the little Hans in the winter was extremally lonely and he expected the Miller who describe his as his friend came to visit him but the Miller never come. (Zainab)

• On the other hand, little Hans in the winter was extremally lonely and he expected the Miller who describes him as his friend comes to visit him but the Miller never comes.

• On the other hand, during the winter, little Hans was extremally lonely, and he expected the Miller who describes him as his friend comes to visit him but the Miller never comes.

• On the other hand, during the winter, little Hans was extremally lonely, and he expected the Miller, who described himself as his friend, to come to visit him but failed to do so.

This act illustrate that friendship is built on selflessness and kindness. (Fadwa)

• Subject verb agreement

• subject verb agreement + wrong form

• fragment

"...The Miller was wondering but he did helped him." (Fadwa)

• Punctuation

• Verb form

• Punctuation + verb form

Friendship is one of the most important thing in our life because a human needs humans around him. (Mohammed)

• word choice

• word choice + S/P

• Subject verb agreement