English Revising & Editing Practice

FOOD IN THE FUTURE:

Sacha wants to use figurative language to introduce the setting. What is the most effective way for her to rewrite sentence 1?

• Everyone looked toward the door as the futuristic instructor bolted into the classroom.

• Everyone looked toward the door as the shiny metal instructor teetered into the classroom.

• The enthusiastic students looked up eagerly as the robot instructor rolled into the classroom.

• The students gazed up like obedient pets as the robot instructor rolled into the classroom.

FOOD IN THE FUTURE:

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 12 and 13 and make the meaning more clear?

• We all laughed and we realized he had to be joking.

• We all laughed, we knew he was joking.

• We all laughed because we thought he had to be joking.

• We laughed, of course he was joking.

Tags

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.5.1E

CCSS.L.7.1B

FOOD IN THE FUTURE:

What sentence should be added after sentence17 to support sentence 16 and add to readers’ understanding of the futuristic setting?

• My least favorite food is broccoli.

• No one touches dirt or steps outside to grow our food.

• Most labs are located inside large factories outside the main city.

• Restaurants purchase their vegetables from labs.

Tags

CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

FOOD IN THE FUTURE:

Sacha wants to convey the narrator’s feelings about the first step of the experiment. Which of the following sentences would be most effective following sentence 20?

• I could not believe I was touching real dirt.

• The dirt was a dark, grainy substance.

• I knew what dirt was but had never seen it before.

• Some of the dirt spilled on my desk, and I brushed it off.

Tags

CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

FOOD IN THE FUTURE:

What transition word or phrase could Sacha add to the beginning of sentence 22 to help the reader follow the narrator’s actions?

• Next

• Therefore

• Finally

• Inadditionto

Tags

CCSS.L.1.1G

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1A

CCSS.L.5.1E

FOOD IN THE FUTURE:

Which sentence should be deleted because it does not relate to the storyline?

• Sentence24

• Sentence25

• Sentence26

• Sentence27

Tags

CCSS.RI.7.10

CCSS.RI.8.10

CCSS.RI.9-10.10

CCSS.RL.8.10

CCSS.RL.9-10.10

SAM HOUSTON:

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 3?

• Change In 1807 to During 1807

• Change Houston’s to Houstons'

• Change moves to moved

• Make no change

Tags

CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.5.1.B-D

CCSS.L.5.1B

CCSS.L.5.1C

CCSS.L.5.1D

SAM HOUSTON:

What change should be made in sentence 4?

• Change War to war

• Insert a comma after Tennessee

• Insert a semicolon after Tennessee

• Change fought to fights

Tags

CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

SAM HOUSTON:

What change should be made in sentence 14?

• Change March to march

• Delete the comma after March 2

• Insert a colon after signed

• Change declaration of independence to Declaration of Independence

Tags

CCSS.L.9-10.2B

SAM HOUSTON:

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 15?

• Change led to lead

• Change General to general

• Change defeated to that defeated

• Make no change

Tags

CCSS.L.3.1D

CCSS.L.4.1B

CCSS.L.5.1.B-D

CCSS.L.5.1C

CCSS.L.5.1D