Revising and Editing III 9th Grade

(27) He later explained that he just wasn’t confident he would be able to land the kayak safe.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 27?

• Change explained to explains

• Change confident to confidant

• Change safe to safely

• No change needs to be made in this sentence.

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CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.3.1G

What is the best change we can make to this sentence: 

After a few more questions and a breif pause, the quiz continued.

• Change few to fewer
• Change breif to brief
• Change the , to a ;
• No change needs to be made

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CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.3.1G

Fatima realizes she has offered a weak thesis in this paper. Which of the following could replace sentences 1 and 2 and provide a more effective thesis statement for Fatima’s paper?

(1) Mia Hamm is a soccer player who is fun to study. (2) She is an expert at the sport who has encouraged others to play

• Mia Hamm is an interesting and fun personality, and I am grateful for this opportunity to research her story. I think that as you read my paper, you will agree that she has added great energy to women’s sports in this country and also to sports around the world.

• Mia Hamm is one of the most celebrated female soccer players of all time and is an inspiration to young women everywhere. Her contributions to women’s soccer have had an unmistakable impact on the sport, both in the United States and internationally.

• There is a soccer player in this country that is clearly more talented than all the rest. Her name is Mia Hamm, and she is an outstanding player and a model athlete who works hard to make sure she is always setting an example for other athletes and for the world at large.

• If you don’t know Mia Hamm, you probably don’t know much. Many people say that she is the greatest soccer player of all time because she is so supremely committed to soccer and also to all that it means to herself and the other people of the world.

(6) What caused these people to build an underground city in the Australian desert? (7) In 1915 14-year-old Willie Hutchison discovered some rich opal fields in the area. (8) After all, miners from all over the world flooded into the region to seek their fortunes.

Which transition should replace "After all" in sentence 8?

• Soon

• Instead

• Finally

• Otherwise

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CCSS.L.1.1G

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1A

CCSS.L.5.1E

(32) “I am proud of Rafa’s decision,” he commented, and I think it is a great testament to his character and courage.”

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 32?

• Insert quotation marks before the first and

• Change I think to we think

• Change testament to testiment

• No change needs to be made in sentence 32.

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CCSS.L.3.2C

CCSS.L.4.2B

CCSS.L.5.2D

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 14?

(14) And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina and won four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way, which helped her team.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, which helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

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CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

Which sentence is written correctly?

• In the morning. the mat is rolled up and placed in a small closet.

• In the morning, the mat is rolled up and placed in a small closet.

• As the mat is rolled up and placed in a small closet, it is in the morning.

• In the morning, the mat is rolled up, and placed in a small closet.

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CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.3.1G

Dan and his wife Lisa have invented a new way of celebrating thanksgiving.

• Change Dan to dan

• Change invented to inventing

• Change celebrating to celabrating

• Change thanksgiving to Thanksgiving.

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CCSS.L.1.2A

CCSS.L.2.2A

CCSS.L.3.2A

CCSS.L.4.2A

CCSS.L.K.2A

Revise this: The forest was very beautiful.

• The forest was enchanting.

• The forest made me very happy.

• Redwoods stretched from the dense, green foliage into the blue sky.

• The forest was big and majestic. There were trees everywhere.

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CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.1.1F

Elizabeth had been studying for hours; ____________, she hoped to do well on the test.

• similarly

• therefore

• nevertheless

• however

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CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RL.8.2