Writing - RJ Essay Evidence (Post-Grading)

Quote - Do you need to leave the "r" in "Romantic" capitalized based on the format?

In the article “Watching New Love as It Sears the Brain,” author Benedict Carey states that “Romantic love is a biological urge, closer in its neutral profile to drives like hunger, thirst or drug craving, the researchers assert than to emotional states like excitement or affection” (Carey).

• Yes

• No

Answer explanation

The answer is NO.

You wouldn't capitalize this word in the middle of a sentence.

Because the writer is blending his/her thoughts with the text, the writer is trying to make a complete sentence.

Unless the word is a proper noun (i.e. name) or a proper pronoun (i.e. I), you need to lowercase it.

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Quote - Do you need to leave the "o" in "Out" capitalized based on the format?

When Benvolio notices Romeo acting differently, he questions him and Romeo states “Out of her favor where I am in love ... Alas, that love, whose view is muffled still, / should, without eyes, see pathways to his will! / Why, then, O brawling love! O love hate, / o any thing, of nothing first created” (Shakespeare 1.1.163-171).

• Yes

• No

Answer explanation

The answer is NO.

You wouldn't capitalize this word in the middle of a sentence.

Because the writer is blending his/her thoughts with the text, the writer is trying to make a complete sentence.

Unless the word is a proper noun (i.e. name) or a proper pronoun (i.e. I), you need to lowercase it.

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Quote - Do you leave or delete the punctuation at the end of a quote?

When Benvolio notices Romeo acting differently, he questions him and Romeo responds “out of her favor where I am in love ... Alas, that love, whose view is muffled still, / should, without eyes, see pathways to his will! / Why, then, O brawling love! O love hate, / o any thing, of nothing first created!” (Shakespeare 1.1.163-171).

• Leave it.

• Delete it

Answer explanation

The answer is DELETE IT.

The ONLY time you leave the punctuation at the end of a quote is when the writer poses a question.

Otherwise...delete commas, periods, slash marks, & exclamation points.

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Lead In - Which is the stronger lead in for this quote?
Hint - think about the sentence structure.

“Out of her favor where I am in love ... Alas, that love, whose view is muffled still, / should, without eyes, see pathways to his will! / Why, then, O brawling love! O love hate, / O any thing, of nothing first created” (Shakespeare 1.1. 163-171).

• When Benvolio notices Romeo acting differently, he questions him and Romeo responds

• Romeo has been acting differently and Benvolio notices it and Romeo states that

Answer explanation

The answer is the FIRST OPTION.

This lead in is a run on sentence. Notice the underlined conjunctions.

Romeo has been acting differently and Benvolio notices it and Romeo states that

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Lead In - Which is the stronger lead in for this quote?
Hint - Think about punctuation.

____ “..romantic love it’s overwhelming, you’re out of control, you’re irrational...” (Carey).

• In Benedict Carey’s article “Watching New Love as It Sears the Brain,” he explains ____

• In the article, “Watching New Love as It Sears the Brain” by Benedict Carey, he explains ____

Answer explanation

The answer is THE FIRST OPTION.

Do you see those commas?

They hug around the thoughts that are in ORANGE. If those ideas weren't important to the sentence, the structure would be fine. It would read like this...

i.e. In the article, he explains...

But, those ORANGE thoughts are very important to the clarity of the sentence. A revision might read like this...

i.e. In the article “Watching New Love as It Sears the Brain,” Benedict Carey explains ____

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Lead In - Which would be the stronger selection?
Hint - Think about sentence construction, punctuation, and tense.

“O, she doth teach the torches to burn bright! / ... Did my heart love till now? Forswear it, sight! / For I ne’er saw true beauty till this night” (Shakespeare 1.5. 44-53).

• Right when the first time Romeo made eye contact with Juliet he had said, “O, she doth....

• When Romeo made eye contact withJuliet he says, “o, she doth...

Answer explanation

The answer is THE SECOND OPTION.
(1) The sentence construction is clearer compared to the other option.

(2) Lowercase the letter "o" at the start of quote because you won't capitalize this in the middle of the sentence.

(3) We write in present, not past, tense in our essays. The writer used "said" instead of "says."

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Lead In - How would you change the fragment to a complete sentence lead in?
Hint - Think about the sentence construction, capitalization, and punctuation.

Benvolio is trying to convince Romeo to go to the party by saying “At this same ancient feast of Capulet’s / sups the fair Rosaline whom thou so loves; / with all the admired beauties of Verona. / Go thither, and with unattainted eye, / compare her face with some that I shall show, / and I will make thee think thy swan a crow” (Shakespeare 1.2. 85-89).

• Benvolio is trying to convince Romeo to go to the party by saying. “At this same....

• Benvolio is trying to convince Romeo to go to the party; “At this same....

Answer explanation

The answer is THE SECOND OPTION.

(1) You can't just add in a period and call it a sentence.

i.e. Benvolio is trying to convince Romeo to go to the party by saying. “At this same....

(2) Complete sentence lead ins need to have a colon (:) instead of a semicolon (;) being used.
i.e. Benvolio is trying to convince Romeo to go to the party: “At this same....

(3) How about making it even stronger by going from passive to active voice?

i.e. Benvolio tries to convince Romeo to go to the party: “At this same....

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Citation - Is the spacing correct in the underlined text?

“Not I, believe me. You have dancing shoes / With mobile soles, I have a soul of lead / So stakes me to the ground I cannot move... / I am too sore enpierced with his shaft / To soar with his light feather; and so bound / I cannot bound a pitch above dull woe. / Under heavy burden do I sink”(Shakespeare 1.4.14-22).

• Yes

• No

Answer explanation

The answer is NO.
Add in a space BEFORE the parenthesis.

i.e. sink” (Shakespeare 1.4.14-22).

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Citation - Is the spacing & punctuation correct in the underlined text?

“Not I, believe me. You have dancing shoes / with mobile soles, I have a soul of lead / so stakes me to the ground I cannot move... / I am too sore enpierced with his shaft / to soar with his light feather; and so bound / I cannot bound a pitch above dull woe. / Under heavy burden do I sink” (Shakespeare 1.4.14-22).

• Yes

• No

Answer explanation

The answer is YES.
(Shakespeare 1.4.14-22).

When citing a play, we have 3 numbers represented here.

Number #1 = Act

Number #2 = Scene

Number(s) #3 = Line(s)

No spacing between the numbers; just use the period to indicate the break.

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Lead In - A fragment lead in is when the writer's thoughts and the cited text combine to make one complete sentence.

• True

• False

Answer explanation

The answer is TRUE.
Underlined Text - This is writer's thoughts.

i.e.

Before going to the party, Romeo tells his friend that they have “....dancing shoes / with mobile soles, I have a soul of lead / so stakes me to the ground I cannot move..." (Shakespeare 1.4. 14-16).

Because they blend together with the text, so editing has to happen.

(1) lowercase the words that follow the / marks because those words are in the middle of the sentence.

(2) use an ellipses (...) to note text was removed in order for the new sentence construction to make sense.

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