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Parallel to that, a person’s mind is most receptive in its early stages, and grows to be more and more rigid as time passes. Therefore, those impositions during babyhood have profound and apparently immutable impacts on how each individual regards their social roles, leading to such disparities in future decisions on university majors as males tend to choose computer technology, where they can freely create their virtual world, and females are prone to go for teaching, where they learn to take great care for children during the kids’ most vulnerable times.

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Parents should embrace the noble notion of equity in treating and raising their children by allowing both girls and boys to choose between Play-Doh or Transformers, offering them various subjects, both natural or social sciences, evaluating and supporting their choices regardless of their gender, or demonstrating that they can always confide in their parents about this topic.

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As for the government, the most effective way to deal with low employability is by investing in education and skills training. Only through up-to-date education and training will college graduates improve their employability.

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On the positive side, online shopping has significantly expanded market access for

businesses, especially small and medium-sized enterprises. With digital stores, businesses

can reach a wider range of customers rather than merely those within near proximity of in

their real-life physical shops. This has fueled economic growth and

provided entrepreneurs with unprecedented opportunities.

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 One of the primary reasons surrounding low employability nowadays is the lack of funds invested in educational sectors. For instance, the Vietnamese government has been the lowest educational investor of the region since 2019, averaging only 0.6% of the country's GDP. Consequently, Vietnamese Universities severely lack monetary funds to invest in up-to-date infrastructure and personnel, which heavily hinders the education of college students. As the quality of education deteriorates, the employability of college graduates also declines

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However, on the negative side, the rapid growth of e-commerce inevitably faces struggles.

One major concern is the potential threat to traditional retail businesses. As consumers

tend to shift towards online platforms, traditional retailers may face difficulties in adapting

to the changing method, leading to closures and unemployment.

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Applying technology to education can help learning become more practical and fascinating for students. Technology can encourage children to utilize a wider range of materials with tablets, computers, and robots, which are contrasted to traditional classrooms with traditional chalks and blackboards. Specifically, with the Internet, students can join interactive online quizzes and games instead of doing exercises on handouts and worksheets. Quizizz, an online website launched for students and teachers to take part in quizzes, is largely beneficial for warm-up activities and revision. As far as machines are concerned, pupils can either learn the basics of various mechanical tools, which is highly practical and engaging, or pursue their passion for robotics. 

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However, I believe that e-learning has its downsides regarding network stability. Firstly, teachers are unable to provide students with effective smart education lessons if the Internet is not stable. With technical difficulties or unstable networks, students are incapable of contributing to the lesson and can only learn passively. If the teacher is organizing a game for the class, only pupils with established Internet connection can fully participate without interruptions.

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As novelty tends to pave the way for potential errors, the introduction of online shopping has left indelible adversities on those who are unable to pursue the trend. Specifically, although digital platforms witness a growing demand from their ever-rising number of customers, it is at the cost of traditional sellers, who may not have sufficient knowledge of such technology, that various businesses are on the verge of bankruptcy. One victim of this trend, Banh Com Gia truyen ong Long (Mr. Long’s Traditional Green Sticky Rice), serves as a candid depiction of such an issue, as the brand’s workers are mostly retired elders who have not familiarized themselves with the use of online software yet. This fuels a steep reduction in its buyers, since even if Mr. Long’s Traditional Green Sticky Rice can present the market with a unique take on Vietnamese classic nibbles, its anonymity from the lack of online representation can still hinder the business’s success when competing with younger but well-put-forward brands online. In other words, unmatched competitions for consumers may be grounded solely on reputation and reaching scope of the shops' Internet website, and not much on the efforts or level of individuality that have been made in the production of goods themselves.

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With 92% of educators expressing a preference for integrating cutting-edge technology into educational settings and 84% of college students attesting to the enhancement of their lecture comprehension through technological gadgets in a survey in the US, it is evident that advanced technology has left an indelible mark on our lives. While much research has also gone into weighing the benefits of the contribution of technology, so far many have been mostly confined to its disadvantages. In this essay, I aim to explore both schools of thoughts and give analysis on why I believe the integration of innovative technologies is more beneficial.

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