Revising an Op-Ed - 12th Grade EpicEd

Which transition word/phrase would best connect the introductory paragraph to the second paragraph?

• Moreover

• Nevertheless

• The reason is that

• As a result

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

How could the sentence "Physical album sales and downloads provided much more revenue to artists in the past" be revised to improve word choice?

• Physical album sales and downloads gave artists much more money back then.

• In the past, artists earned significantly higher revenues from physical album sales and downloads.

• Physical album sales and downloads were better for artists financially in the old days.

• No revision is necessary.

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CCSS.RI.11-12.8

CCSS.RI.9-10.7

CCSS.RL.11-12.8

CCSS.RL.8.7

CCSS.RL.9-10.7

To improve the organization of the op-ed, where should the counterargument paragraph be moved?

• After the first body paragraph

• After the second body paragraph

• After the third body paragraph

• It should remain in its current position

How could the sentence "Music has become disposable and artists can't rely on loyal fans buying albums" be revised to have a more appropriate tone for the op-ed?

• Music is now treated as a disposable commodity, making it challenging for artists to maintain a loyal fanbase that consistently purchases albums.

• Music is basically trash now, and fans are too lazy to buy albums like they used to.

• Artists are struggling because fans don't appreciate music enough to buy albums anymore.

• No revision is necessary.

Which word would best replace "paltry" in the sentence "That's a paltry sum" to improve word choice?

• tiny

• meager

• pathetic

• unfair

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CCSS.RI.11-12.4

CCSS.RI.9-10.4

CCSS.RL.11-12.4

CCSS.RL.8.4

CCSS.RL.9-10.4

How could the sentence "Streaming payouts need to increase and alternative revenue streams like touring, merchandise, and sponsorships should be developed" be revised to create two sentences with better variety?

• Streaming payouts need to increase. Developing revenue streams like touring, merchandise, and sponsorships.

• Increasing streaming payouts is crucial. Developing alternative revenue streams like touring, merchandise, and sponsorships is key.

• Streaming payouts need to increase, and alternative revenue streams should be developed. These include touring, merchandise, and sponsorships.

• No revision is necessary.

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CCSS.RF.3.3B

CCSS.RF.3.3C

CCSS.RF.3.3D

CCSS.RF.4.3A

CCSS.RF.5.3A

Which transitional phrase would best connect the third and fourth body paragraphs?

• In contrast

• Furthermore

• Despite this

• As a result

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

How could the sentence "Unless things change, we risk losing a diversity of artists who can't make a sustainable living" be revised to improve word choice and clarity?

• If things don't change, we might lose lots of different artists who can't make enough money.

• Without significant changes, we face the potential loss of artistic diversity as many artists struggle to earn a livable wage.

• Unless things get better, artists won't be able to survive and we'll have less variety in music.

• No revision is necessary.

Which sentence would best conclude the op-ed and reinforce the call to action?

• In conclusion, the music industry is a mess and we need to do something about it.

• By working together to create a more equitable music industry, we can ensure that artists are fairly compensated and that music remains a vibrant and diverse art form for generations to come.

• The music industry has a lot of problems, but if we take action, we can make it better for everyone.

• No additional sentence is necessary.

Which of the following techniques would best improve the overall flow and coherence of the sentences in the op-ed?

• Using a variety of sentence lengths and structures

• Incorporating more complex vocabulary words

• Combining all sentences into one long, continuous sentence

• No improvement is necessary