Revise/Edit Practice

(2) The city had 59,500 buildings many of them large ornately decorated such as the Courthouse and the Tribune Building.

How should sentence 2 be revised?

• The city displayed over 59,500 buildings, many of them large and ornately decorated, like the Courthouse and the Tribune Building.

• The city possessed 59,500 buildings in which a lot of them, such as the Courthouse and the Tribune Building were large and ornately decorated.

• The city boasted having 59,500 buildings, many of them— such as the Courthouse and the Tribune Building—large and ornately decorated.

• The city had 59,500 buildings, many of them large ornately decorated, such as the Courthouse and the Tribune Building.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

(4) Many of the remaining buildings (even the ones proclaimed to be “fireproof”) looked solid but were actually jerrybuilt affairs. (5) The stone or brick exteriors hid wooden frames and floors, all topped with highly flammable tar or shingle roofs.

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 4 and 5?

• Many of the remaining buildings (even the ones proclaimed to be “fireproof”) looked solid but were actually jerrybuilt affairs; the stone or brick exteriors hid wooden frames and floors, all topped with highly flammable tar or shingle roofs.

• Many of the remaining buildings (even the ones proclaimed to be “fireproof”) looked solid but were actually jerrybuilt affairs, and the stone or brick exteriors hid wooden frames and floors, all topped with highly flammable tar or shingle roofs.

• Many of the remaining buildings (even the ones proclaimed to be “fireproof”) looked solid but were actually jerrybuilt affairs: the stone or brick exteriors, hid wooden frames and floors, all topped with highly flammable tar or shingle roofs.

• Many of the remaining buildings (even the ones proclaimed to be “fireproof”) looked solid but were actually jerrybuilt affairs the stone or brick exteriors hid wooden frames and floors, all topped with highly flammable tar or shingle roofs.

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CCSS.L.9-10.2A

(9) The situation was worst in the middle-class and poorer districts. (10) Wealthier districts were by no means free of fire hazards. (11) Stately, stone and brick homes had wood interiors and stood side by side with smaller wood-frame houses. (12) Wooden stables and other storage buildings were common, and trees lined the streets and filled the yards. (13) The links between richer and poorer sections went beyond the materials used for construction or the way buildings were crammed together.

Jim would like to add the following detail to the second paragraph (sentences 9-13).

Lot sizes were small, and owners usually filled them up with cottages, barns, sheds, and outhouses—all made of fast-burning wood, naturally.

Where should this sentence be inserted?

• After sentence 9

• After sentence 10

• After sentence 11

• After sentence 12

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CCSS.RI.4.2

CCSS.RI.5.2

CCSS.RL.3.2

CCSS.RL.4.2

CCSS.RL.5.2

(16) The answer is to make the roads and sidewalks out of wood and elevate them above the waterline, in some places by several feet.

How should sentence 16 be changed?

• Change the period to an exclamation mark

• Delete the comma after waterline

• Change them to it

• Change is to was

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CCSS.L.1.2B

CCSS.L.4.3B

CCSS.L.K.2B

(17) On the day the fire started, over 55 miles of pine-block streets and 600 miles of wooden sidewalks bound the 23,000 acres of the city in a highly combustable knot.

What change needs to be made in sentence 17?

• Delete the comma after started

• Change combustable to combustible

• Insert and before over

• No change needs to be made.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

(18) Fires were common in all cities back then and Chicago was no exception. (19) In 1863, there had been 186 reported fires in Chicago; the number had risen to 515 by 1868.

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 18?

• Fires were common in all cities back then and Chicago, was no exception.

• Fires were common, in all cities back then, and Chicago was no exception.

• Fires were common in all cities back then, and Chicago was no exception.

• No change needs to be made.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

(21) The next year saw even more fires spring up, mainly because the summer had been unusually dry.

How should sentence 21 be changed?

• Change had to has

• Delete been

• Change saw to see

• Sentence 21 should not be changed.

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CCSS.L.4.1B

CCSS.L.5.1.B-D

CCSS.L.5.1B

CCSS.L.5.1C

CCSS.L.5.1D

(26) What made Sunday the eighth different and particularly dangerous was the steady wind blowing in from the southwest.

Jim wants to expand on the idea he has expressed in sentence 26. Which sentence could BEST follow sentence 26?

• The fire had just began when the wind blew the flames to the east and to the west, and then flared up into a thousand yellow-orange fingers.

• It was this gusting, swirling wind that drove the flames across neighboring yards and caused near by buildings to burn in only a few minutes, resulting in one of the worst fires Chicago had ever seen.

• Due to the wind, people were not able to get to the houses quickly enough and therefore more houses burred then in previously seen fires.

• Chicago is known for being the windy city, and on this day the wind did nothing to help the city and its 59,500 buildings.

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CCSS.L.1.1J

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.5.1E

(15) How does an animal make it through all that.

What change needs to be made in sentence 15?

• Change does to did

• Change an to a

• Change the period to a question mark

• No change needs to be made.

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CCSS.L.1.2B

CCSS.L.4.3B

CCSS.L.K.2B

(6) “We are pretty confedent that we just scratched the surface in terms of that number of total incidents over that period,” says the study’s lead author, Daniel Hughes, a post-doctoral research fellow at the University of Illinois Urbana-Champaign.

How should sentence 6 be changed?

• Change confedent to confident

• Delete the comma after period

• Change fellow to felow

• Sentence 6 should not be changed.

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CCSS.L.2.2C