Revising and Editing

What is the MOST effective way to revise sentence 2?

• Satoshi Tajiri developed the concept for Pokémon during his early years as a video game designer.

• During his early years, the concept for Pokémon was developed by Satoshi Tajiri, as a video game designer.

• Satoshi Tajiri as a video game designer during his early years developed the concept for Pokémon.

• The concept of Pokémon was developed by a video game designer, during his early years, Satoshi Tajiri.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

Angela would like to add another detail to support the ideas presented in her second paragraph (sentences 5-8). Which sentence BEST follows and supports the information in sentence 5?

• Then as a teenager, he developed a passion for playing arcade games.

• Since he lived in a rural area of Japan, he was surrounded by nature.

• It was obvious that Tajiri had many interests and was naturally curious.

• In Japan, like in other countries in the world, there are millions of bugs.

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CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.7.1

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.1

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

Angela has used an inappropriate transition at the beginning of the sentence 7. Which transition should replace In other words in this sentence?

• However

• Secondly

• Even so

• In fact

Which sentence in the sixth paragraph (sentences 23–26) contains unnecessary information and should be removed?

• Sentence 23

• Sentence 24

• Sentence 25

• Sentence 26

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

The meaning of sentence 5 is unclear. Toby can improve this sentence by changing the image of him to the image of —

• Brice.

• his parents.

• the rescued.

• Ziggy.

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CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 17 and 18?

• The rescue had come just in time, they didn’t have enough water to make it much longer.

• The rescue had come just in time and didn’t have enough water to make it much longer.

• Since they didn't have enough water to make it much longer, the rescue had come just in time.

• The rescue, which had come just in time, didn’t have enough water to make it much longer.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 4?

• Change there to they're

• Delete the comma after then

• Change assurence to assurance

• No change needs to be made in this sentence.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 15?

• Insert a comma after "bowl"

• Change "there" to "their"

• Change "wasn’t" to "weren’t"

• No change needs to be made in this sentence.

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CCSS.L.3.1A

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 42?

• Change Its to It's

• Delete the comma after okay

• Delete the quotation marks before He’s

• Sentence 42 does not need to be changed.

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CCSS.L.1.1B

CCSS.L.2.2C

CCSS.L.3.2D

Where should Michael insert the sentence "Getting on the ski lift was not a problem, but getting off of the lift proved to be a challenge."?

• After sentence 6

• After sentence 8

• After sentence 9

• This sentence should not be added to this paragraph.

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CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5