Editing/ Revising (Curtis/Extreme Weather)

What change should be made in sentence 1?

• Change learned to has learned

• Change cruise to cruises

• Insert a comma after parents

• Change ocean to Ocean

What change should be made in sentence 4?

• Change which to when

• Change an affect to an effect

• Insert a comma after moon

• Change didn't know to did know

What change should be made in sentence 7?

• Change than to then

• Change is to are

• Change A full to An full

• Change strongest to stronger

Harriet would like to add a more effective controlling idea. Which sentence should replace sentence 1 to serve as a more effective controlling idea for her composition?

• Extreme weather has been a problem from some time now.

• People need to be aware of the things that happen when they make things.

• Some scientists believe that the world is experiencing more extreme weather than ever before.

• Some scientists think we need to take care of the planet before it is too late.

Harriet has not used the MOST effective word in sentence 3. Which word should replace distressing in this sentence?

• concerning

• troubling

• moving

• affecting

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 9 and 10?

• The sun’s rays go through the glass to create a warm atmosphere, and also, it prevents the heat from leaving.

• The sun’s rays go through the glass to create a warm atmosphere, but also, it prevents the heat from leaving.

• The sun’s rays go through the glass to create a warm atmosphere, since also it prevents the heat from leaving.

• The sun’s rays go through the glass to create a warm atmosphere, also prevents the heat from leaving.

Harriet wants to add a transition at the beginning of sentence 16 to improve the connection to the previous sentence. Which transition should Harriet add to the beginning of sentence 16?

• However

• Therefore

• Not only that

• Moreover

What is the MOST effective way to revise sentence 27?

• Humans can’t live without modern inventions such as stoves, refrigerators, and light bulbs, because they have to think of ways to help make the problem better.

• Humans can’t live without modern inventions such as stoves, refrigerators, and light bulbs, so they have to think of ways to help make the problem better.

• Humans can’t live without modern inventions such as stoves, refrigerators, and light bulbs so they have to think of ways to help make the problem better.

• Humans can’t live without modern inventions such as stoves, refrigerators, and light bulbs, since they have to think of ways to help make the problem better.

Harriet wants to improve the conclusion to her paper. Which sentence should be added after sentence 33 to bring this composition to a more effective conclusion?

• Everyone should think about how to solve this important problem that affects us all.

• The world hopes that young people can find a solution to this problem.

• Since no one can stop natural disasters, we need to stop extreme weather.

• The future of the Earth rests in everyone’s hands now, but even more in young people who can make a big difference!