Friday April 5th: revising and editing

Is this a revising or editing passage?

• revising

• editing

What is the strategy for Revising?

What is the MOST effective way for Claudia to write sentence 1?

• Many students enjoy learning when activities are involved.

• If activities involve learning, many students enjoy doing them.

• When many students enjoy learning, activities are involved.

• Much of the learning that students enjoy involves activities.

Tags

CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

Claudia wants to use a stronger and more positive word to replace good in sentence 7. Which word would BEST meet Claudia’s goal? ​ (a)  

• ideal
• available
• actual
• open

Tags

CCSS.RI.4.3

CCSS.RI.5.3

CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.4.5

Sentence 15 includes repeated information. Which revision MOST improves sentence 15?

• Once the space is chosen, the school community can gather lab items and materials there.

• Once the space is chosen and set aside, the school community can gather lab materials for our lab.

• Once and after the space is chosen, the community can work to gather lab materials.

• Once the space is chosen, the school community can gather what is needed for the lab.

Claudia left out the following sentence from her fourth paragraph (sentences 14–19).

A science lab should also have cabinets and drawers for storing materials throughout the school year.

Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?​ (a)  

• After sentence 14
• After sentence 16
• After sentence 18

Tags

CCSS.RI.4.3

CCSS.RI.5.3

CCSS.RI.5.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.6.3

Claudia wants to improve the conclusion of her letter. Which sentence should replace sentence 24 to bring her letter to a more effective close?

• Students will be able to enjoy science if they have their own science lab.

• In just a short time, students could begin using our new lab, but we have to create it first.

• Students can be proud that they accomplished something important.

• Our school might become a leader in improving science education for students at other schools.

Is this a revising or editing passage?

• revising

• editing

Why is it important to edit our writing?

What change should be made in sentence 2?

• I did not think a field trip to an outdoor museum would be interesting or I was wrong.

• I did not think a field trip to an outdoor museum would be interesting, since I was wrong.

• I did not think a field trip to an outdoor museum would be interesting because I was wrong.

• I did not think a field trip to an outdoor museum would be interesting, but I was wrong.

Tags

CCSS.L.1.1G

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1A

CCSS.L.5.1E