Revising for Clarity

Which sentence is written the most clearly?

• The poem was beautiful that Sheila wrote for the program.

• The poem that Sheila wrote for the program was beautiful.

• It was beautiful, the poem Sheila wrote for the program.

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TEKS.ELA.8.10D.VI

Which sentence is written the most clearly?

• The poem was beautiful that Sheila wrote for the program.

• The poem that Sheila wrote for the program was beautiful.

• It was beautiful, the poem Sheila wrote for the program.

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TEKS.ELA.8.10D.VI

Which sentence is written the most clearly?

• John looked for the missing toy in the bedroom, and the den is where Stacey looked for it.

• John looked for the missing toy in the bedroom while Stacey looked in the den.

• Stacey looked in the den and John looked in the bedroom for the missing toy.

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TEKS.ELA.E1.9.C

TEKS.ELA.E2.9.C

Which sentence is written the most clearly?

• Maria told the joke in the lunch line to Mrs. Ruiz about the penguin.

• Mrs. Ruiz was told in the lunch line the joke about the penguin.

• Maria told Mrs. Ruiz the joke about the penguin while in the lunch line.

Which sentence is written the most clearly?

• Ms. Kennedy has a picture of her husband standing next to am elephant on her desk.

• On her desk, Mrs. Kennedy has a picture of her husband standing next to an elephant.

• Standing next to an elephant, Mrs. Kennedy has a picture of her husband on her desk.

Which sentence is written the most clearly?

• My sister and I, whenever it snows, we shovel her driveway for Mrs. Grant.

• My sister and I shovel her driveway for Mrs. Grant whenever it snows.

• I shovel the driveway for Mrs. Grant whenever it snows with my sister.

Which sentence is written the most clearly?

• Seeing the wasps emerge from the nest, my heart began to pound.

• My heart began to pound seeing the wasps emerge from the nest.

• My heart began to pound from seeing the wasps emerge from the nest.

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TEKS.ELA.4.2A.I

TEKS.ELA.4.2A.II

TEKS.ELA.4.2A.III

TEKS.ELA.4.2A.IV

TEKS.ELA.4.2A.VI

Which sentence is written the most clearly?

• For the science fair, the project that was most interesting was done by Jamal.

• The most interesting project for the science fair was done by Jamal.

• Done by Jamal, the most interesting project was for the science fair.

Which sentence is written the most clearly?

• Under the old oak tree, the children found a hidden treasure buried.

• The children found a hidden treasure buried under the old oak tree.

• A hidden treasure buried under the old oak tree was found by the children.

Which sentence is written the most clearly?

• Running through the park, the flowers looked beautiful to Sarah.

• Sarah thought the flowers looked beautiful running through the park.

• While running through the park, Sarah thought the flowers looked beautiful.