7th Revising and Editing

Rory has included a sentence in the first paragraph (sentences 1–7) that repeats information. Which sentence should be removed from this paragraph?

• Sentence 3

• Sentence 4

• Sentence 5

• Sentence 6

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CCSS.RI.6.2

CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

What is the MOST effective way to revise sentence 14?

• Mom walked ahead and squinted to read the sign and was puzzled to read it.

• Puzzled, Mom walked ahead and squinted to read the sign.

• Mom was puzzled and squinting, and she read the sign, walking ahead.

• Puzzled and reading the sign, Mom squinted, who walked ahead.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

What is the MOST effective transition word or phrase to add to the beginning of sentence 22?

• In conclusion

• Meanwhile

• In fact

• Frequently

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CCSS.L.1.1G

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1A

CCSS.L.5.1E

Combine the ideas in sentence 27 and 28 in a clear and effective way.

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CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.5.1E

CCSS.L.7.1B

Which sentence should replace sentence 30 to bring this letter to a more effective closing?

• This has been a difficult letter for me to write, but I think that it's important for you and your employees to know about my family.

• I hope you will reconsider your store hours so that everyone in the area can continue to enjoy your delicious ice cream this winter.

• Your ice cream is so delicious, and due to this fact, I don't want to ever eat something stale from my freezer again.

• I am absolutely certain that everyone in our local community agrees with everything I have written to you in this letter today.

Maylin needs a more effective controlling idea for her paper. Which of the following should replace sentence 8 to BEST accomplish this goal?

• Participants may be fast or slow, but the reward for finishing is worth it.

• Of these kinds of races, the Spartan Race is one of the best known.

• Scaling walls and crawling through mud must be quite entertaining activities.

• The obstacle course races are surprisingly popular around the world.

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CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

Maylin has included a sentence that does not belong in the second paragraph (sentences 9–15). Which sentence should she remove from this paragraph?

• Sentence 9

• Sentence 11

• Sentence 13

• Sentence 15

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CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

Which sentence should replace sentence 20 to bring the third paragraph (sentences 16–20) to a more effective closing?

• They are required to pull or drag an extremely heavy item from one point to another.

• Each obstacle demands strength and stamina from athletes who are already tired from running.

• Some participants choose to share their Spartan Race experiences in online forums.

• Participants should register for a Spartan Race at least a few days before the day of the event.

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

Maylin wants to use a more effective word than quality in sentence 27. Which word should replace quality in this sentence?

• confirmation

• satisfaction

• refreshment

• agreement

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CCSS.L.3.1C

What revision, if any, should be made in sentence 34?

• Some racers have described situations, unable to manage them on their own, and they helped them complete a part of the course that they didn't know.

• Some racers have described situations since people that they didn't know helped them complete and finish a part of the course that they could not have managed on their own.

• Some racers have described situations, and there were people they didn't know who helped them, and they completed a part of the course that they could not have managed on their own.

• No change is needed.

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CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.5.1E

CCSS.L.7.1B