Revising Personal Narratives for Young Writers

In this episode on revising personal narratives, the focus is on improving writing by adding, removing, and changing words. The video explains how to enhance a story by adding adjectives, adverbs, and details, removing unnecessary words, and changing words to make the narrative more engaging. Examples are provided to illustrate these techniques, and the importance of making writing clear and interesting is emphasized. The episode concludes with a preview of the next topic, editing the story.

What is a personal narrative?

• A scientific report

• A true story about someone else's life

• A fictional story

• A true story about your own life

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Why do we revise our writing?

• To make it longer

• To correct spelling mistakes

• To make our writing make sense and sound better

• To change the story completely

What can you add to your story to make it more detailed?

• Graphs and charts

• Unrelated facts

• Adjectives and adverbs

• Numbers and statistics

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What type of words can you add to describe actions in your story?

• Pronouns

• Nouns

• Prepositions

• Adverbs

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What did the narrator add to describe how high they jumped?

• Quite high

• Extremely high

• Very high

• Super high

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What should you remove from your story?

• Unnecessary words or sentences

• Dialogue

• Interesting facts

• All adjectives

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What detail did the narrator decide was not important to their story?

• The store being green

• The dog being white and fluffy

• The color of the car

• Getting good grades

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How can you make your story more interesting?

• By adding more characters

• By making it shorter

• By writing in all capital letters

• By changing boring words to more interesting ones

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What word did the narrator change to 'gazed' to make it more interesting?

• Saw

• Looked

• Observed

• Noticed

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What mistake did the narrator correct in their story?

• One come up to one came up

• One looked to one gazed

• One saw to one observed

• One noticed to one saw

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