Effective Sentence Revision Techniques

The video provides a comprehensive walkthrough of the 2023 ELA test, focusing on revising and editing questions. Angela from Custom Classroom offers insights and interpretations, emphasizing the importance of understanding the rationale behind correct answers. The video includes a detailed breakdown of both the editing and revising sections, with practical examples and explanations. Additionally, Angela introduces a 12-week set of editing and revising warm-ups, available for free trial, to help students prepare effectively for the test.

What is the main purpose of Angela's video?

• To discuss general teaching strategies.

• To review math test questions.

• To advertise her new book.

• To provide a detailed walkthrough of the STAR 2023 ELA test.

Which sentence correctly revises sentence two in the editing section?

• She had volunteered to help Grandma clean out her attic and at the time she had hoped there would be something wonderful it would be hidden in its Dusty Corners.

• When she had volunteered to help Grandma clean out her attic she had hoped there would be something wonderful hidden in its Dusty Corners.

• She had volunteered to help her grandma clean out her attic and at the time had hoped that there would be something wonderful hidden in its Dusty corners.

• When she had volunteered to help Grandma clean out her attic, she had hoped there would be something wonderful hidden in its Dusty Corners.

What is the correct way to correct the error in sentence three?

• Instead, she had found only clothes, books, and dishes that had seen far better days.

• Also, she had found only clothes, books, and dishes.

• Namely, she had found only clothes, books, and dishes.

• Certainly, she had found only clothes, books, and dishes.

What change is needed in sentence four?

• Change 'as' to 'even though'.

• Change 'opened' to 'opens'.

• Change 'she' to 'they'.

• Insert a comma after 'box'.

What change is needed in sentence six?

• Change 'was' to 'is'.

• Change 'from' to 'and'.

• Change 'called' to 'it was called'.

• Change 'Woods Hill Journal' to 'Capital Woods Hill Journal'.

Which sentence should be removed from the first paragraph of Rory's letter?

• It's quite possible that it is from our family celebration last July.

• It is 7 P.M on a Friday night and I am eating an incredibly stale popsicle from the back of my freezer.

• The freezer burn and flat flavor make me wonder how long this Frozen treat has been hiding in there.

• I honestly don't know how long it's been in there.

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 14?

• Puzzled and reading the sign, mom squinted who walked ahead.

• Mom was puzzled and squinting and she read the sign walking ahead.

• Puzzled, mom walked ahead and squinted to read the sign.

• Mom walked ahead and squinted to read the sign and was puzzled to read it.

What is the most effective transition word or phrase to add at the beginning of sentence 22?

• In fact

• Meanwhile

• In conclusion

• Frequently

How should sentences 27 and 28 be combined?

• Everyone enjoys a 10 cup of your delicious flavor; it doesn't matter what the temperature is outside.

• Everyone enjoys a 10 cup of your delicious flavor because it doesn't matter what the temperature is outside.

• Everyone enjoys a 10 cup of your delicious flavor, and it doesn't matter what the temperature is outside.

• Everyone enjoys a 10 cup of your delicious flavor. It doesn't matter what the temperature is outside.

Which sentence should replace sentence 30 to bring Rory's letter to a more effective closing?

• I am absolutely certain that everyone in our local community agrees with everything I have written to you in this letter today.

• Your ice cream is so delicious and due to this fact I don't want to ever eat something stale from my freezer again.

• I hope you will reconsider your store hours so that everyone in our area can continue to enjoy your delicious ice cream this winter.

• This has been a difficult letter for me to write but I think that it's important for you and your employees to know about my family.