8th Grade Exemplar Paper Impact of the Automobile

1. What is the thesis statement? 

• Many different impacts on Americans, both positive and negative were caused by the automobile.

• Think about when you are going to the store or the doctor's office.

• Do you ever think about how different the average person's life would be if automobiles were not created?

• After the creation of automobiles, many Americans were positively impacted.

How many times do you see the thesis statement in the paper? 

Where is it located (which paragraphs)? 

• 2/Paragraphs 1 and 4

• 1/ Paragraph 1

• 3/ Paragraphs 1,2,4

• 2/Paragraphs 1

What is the hook? 

Where is it located? 

• Do you ever think about how different the average person's life would be if automobiles were not created?

  P1

• Think about when you are going to the store or the doctor's office.

  P2

• Impacts from the creation of cars can vary from positive to negative.

  P4

• Despite many benefits of automobiles rising in popularity, there were also downsides.

  P3

3. How many transitions did you find? 

Give 4 examples of different ones. 

• 14

  also, After, In addition, Even though

• 10

  Positive, negative, creation, After

• 4

  After, This means, In addition, Because of

• 1

  Also

4. What are the names of the two texts the author uses for evidence? 

5. How many pieces of evidence does the author use? 

• The Rise of the Automobile and 20th Century Automobiles

  4

• The Rise of the Automobile and

  20th Century Automobiles

  2

• The Rise of the Automobile

  1

• 20th Century Automobiles

  1

4. Which paragraph is mostly “positive” examples? Give an example of a word that is positive in the text.

• 1

  impact

• 2

  positively

• 3

  downside

• 4

  benefit

4. Which paragraph is mostly “negative” examples? Give an example of a word that is negative in the paragraph.

• 3

  non-pleasing

• 1

  negative

• 2

  popularity

• 4

  suffer

4. What is the call to action/connection to the reader? 

Where is it located?

• "Next time you ride in a car, think about all the different ways that cars have impacted citizens like you."

  P4

• "Impacts from the creation of cars can vary from positive to negative."

  P4

• "Think about when you are going to the store or the doctor's office."

  P1

• "This shows how automobiles have had a negative impact all over the world."

  P3

Which is an example of evidence? 2 correct answers

• "gas stations and motels sprouted like mushrooms after a storm"

• states that because of the construction of local roads and interstate systems

• "visually distressing"

• it states that signs, billboards, roads, and parking lots

Which is an explanation for the evidence? 2 correct answers

• "with automobiles had a new freedom and flexibility"

• This means that they could travel and enjoy new experiences that they were not able to before.

• This shows how negative side effects include non-pleasing sights.

• "asphalt particles from roads, rubber particles from tires, and oil and grease fouled waterways."