Revise and Edit Review EOC

Candice may have a redundant sentence in the fourth paragraph (sentences 22–26). Which sentence, if any, should be deleted?

• Sentence 24

• Sentence 25

• Sentence 26

• No sentence should be deleted

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CCSS.RI.9-10.1

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 6 and 7?

• My own sister is having a hard time in math attending one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school.

• My own sister attends one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school although she is having a hard time in math.

• My own sister, who attends one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school, is having a hard time in math.

• My own sister attends one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school, she is having a hard time in math.

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CCSS.L.6.2A

CCSS.L.7.1A

CCSS.L.9-10.1B

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 3 and 4?

• But online networking, which is very popular with teens today, promotes short, superficial connections.

• But online networking promotes short, superficial connections, it is very popular with teens today.

• But online networking that promotes short, superficial connections, it is very popular with teens today.

• But online networking promotes short, superficial connections with teens today, which it is very popular.

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CCSS.L.6.2A

CCSS.L.7.1A

CCSS.L.9-10.1B

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 16?

• Everyone communicates in person in one way, they communicate in different ways over the phone, through texting, or in online posts.

• Everyone communicates differently in person than they do when speaking over the phone, sending texts, or writing online posts.

• Everyone communicates in person differently than they do over the phone, to send texts, or posting online.

• Everyone communicates in person, over the phone, through texting, or in online posts differently.

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CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.3.1G

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 4?

• Change benefitial to beneficial

• Insert a comma after people

• Change healthier to healthiest

• No change is needed in sentence 4.

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CCSS.L.3.1G

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 26?

• Change minimal to minamal

• Change are to were

• Delete the comma after appropriate

• No change is necessary.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

What change should be made in sentence 30?

• Change poet to Poet

• Change until to Until

• Change one’s to ones’

• Change remains to remained

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CCSS.L.1.2A

CCSS.L.2.2A

CCSS.L.3.2A

CCSS.L.4.2A

CCSS.L.K.2A

What is the correct way to write sentence 8?

• She promised her mother that she would succeed consequently, she walked the four-mile distance daily, between her home and school.

• She promised her mother that she would succeed consequently she walked the four-mile distance daily between her home and school.

• She promised her mother that she would succeed. Consequently, she walked; the four-mile distance daily between her home and school.

• She promised her mother that she would succeed. Consequently, she walked the four-mile distance daily between her home and school.

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CCSS.L.1.2B

CCSS.L.5.2

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 10?

• Change have run to ran

• Delete the comma after year

• Change was forced to is forced

• Make no change

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.5.1.B-D

CCSS.L.5.1B

CCSS.L.5.1C

CCSS.L.5.1D

What change should Gena make in sentence 17?

• Insert a comma after September

• Change whom to who

• Change proficient to proficiant

• Change came to comes

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CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.4.1A