Stringy Sentences

1. I went to the store to buy some milk and eggs, but then I realized I forgot my wallet, so I had to go back home, and when I got there, I found my wallet on the table, but then I noticed I was out of gas, so I had to walk back to the store.

• Stringy

• Not stringy

• I woke up early and got ready for school and packed my bag and ate breakfast and then I caught the bus and talked to my friend and finally got to class.

• Stringy

• Not stringy

• We watch animals other than birds, and one Saturday, Uncle Raymond spotted a chipmunk, and another time, I noticed a doe and her fawn behind a tree, and we always see a lot of butterflies and moths.

• Stringy

• Not stringy

1. Last time I saw baby robins in their nest, and there were four babies, and an adult bird was feeding them.

• • a. Last time I saw baby robins in their nest, and there were four babies. An adult bird was feeding them.

• • b. Last time, I saw baby robins in their nest. There were four babies; therefore, an adult bird was feeding them.

• • c. Last time, I saw baby robins in their nest. There were four babies, and an adult bird was feeding them.

1. Which among the sentences is the appropriate  revision of this stringy sentence:

After our walk, Uncle Raymond and I go to my house, and we look up each bird in a guide, and we show my parents pictures of the birds we saw.

• • After our walk, Uncle Raymond and I go to my house, and we look up each bird in a guide. Hence, we show my parents pictures of the birds we saw.

• • After our walk, Uncle Raymond and I go to my house. We look up each bird in a guide. We show my parents pictures of the birds we saw.

• • After our walk, Uncle Raymond and I go to my house. We look up each bird in a guide, and show my parents pictures of the birds we saw.

1. Which is the best of the sentences below:

• • Lightning is one of the most beautiful and spectacular events in nature

• • Lightning is beautiful, and lightning is a spectacular event in nature, and it is so memorable leaving marks every where.

1. Select the best phrased sentence below:

• • Benjamin Franklin used a kite to help prove that lightning was made of electricity, but his experiment was very dangerous, and Franklin was lucky that he was not killed

• • Benjamin Franklin used a kite to help prove that lightning was made of electricity. Franklin was lucky that he was not killed during the experiment.

• • When Benjamin Franklin used a kite to help prove that lightning was made of electricity, he was lucky that he was not killed.

1. Choose the sentence that needs corrections

• • The safest place to be during an electrical storm is inside a building or a car, but be careful not to touch any of the metal car parts.

• • The safest place to be during an electrical storm is inside a building, or you can also take shelter inside a car, but be careful not to touch any of the metal parts

• • The safest place to be during an electrical storm is inside.

1. Select the best phrasing of this sentence

• • Hair can be changed with a snip of the scissors, curling, straightening, or dyeing.

• • Hair can be changed with a snip of the scissors. Hair can also be changed by curling, straightening, or dyeing

• • Hair can be changed with a snip of the scissors, and hair can also be changed by curling, straightening, or dyeing

1. Choose the sentence that needs corrections

• • We feel more confident to face the world, when we think our hair looks good.

• • We think our hair looks good, and we feel more confident, and we feel able to face the world.

• • If we think our hair looks good, we feel more confident and able to face the world.