Revising and Editing

31. Use "Big Bend National Park" to answer the following question:

32. 31. Raul needs to include a stronger thesis statement in his essay. Which sentence should replace sentence 5 to best accomplish this goal?

• A. With miles of hiking trails, rafting, wildlife, and incredible scenery, Big Bend has something extraordinary to offer everyone.

• B. A wide variety of activities are offered at this park, so all visitors to Big Bend should be able to find at least one thing that would appeal to them.

• C. There is hiking and rafting for adventurous visitors, but there is also wildlife and scenery for those visitors who might prefer a quieter visit to Big Bend.

• D. Depending on what your interests are, all visitors to Big Bend should be able to find an activity, from hiking and rafting, to observing wildlife or different landscapes.

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CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

32. Use "Big Bend National Park" to answer the following question:

34. 32. Raul wants to add a supporting sentence to the second paragraph (sentences 6–13). Which sentence should be added after sentence 8?

• F. Most of the fish species in Big Bend are the size of minnows, but there are also large catfish.

• G. Nearly a quarter of the animal species native to North America can be found in Big Bend.

• H. If actions are not soon taken, many endangered species will be lost forever.

• J. Tropical rain forests, which are not found in North America, would have more animal species.

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CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

37. Use "Be Prepared" to answer the following question:

39. 37. What revision, if any, should be made in sentence 11?

• A. She'd made it while managing the kids, what had looked like a perfect dough.

• B. While managing the kids, she had made a dough, looking perfect.

• C. She'd managed the kids while making a dough that had looked like a perfect dough.

• D. No change is needed.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

38. Use "Be Prepared" to answer the following question:

40. 38. Sentence 16 needs to be revised. In the box provided, rewrite this sentence in a clear and effective way.

Sentence 16: Natalie and Owen turned around with their hands over their ears to block the shrill sound, who had been watching a movie.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

39. Use "Be Prepared" to answer the following question:

41. 39. What revision, if any, is needed in sentence 20?

• A. Embarrassed by the debacle, Sophia decided to just open the windows for seeing if that would fix the problem.

• B. Embarrassed by the debacle, Sophia decided to just open the windows and see if that would fix the problem.

• C. Embarrassed by the debacle, Sophia decided to just fix that problem that would open the windows.

• D. No change is needed.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

41. Use "Be Prepared" to answer the following question:

42. 41. Which transition word or phrase should be added to the beginning of sentence 26?

• A. Accidentally

• B. For example

• C. Apparently

• D. In the meantime

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CCSS.L.1.1G

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1A

CCSS.L.5.1E

Use "Cover Letter" to answer the following question:

What is the main purpose of Ruby's cover letter?

• To apply for a part-time position

• To inquire about pet grooming services

• To request a reference

• To advertise her pet care business

31. Use "Cover Letter" to answer the following question:

What experience does Ruby highlight in her cover letter?

• Owning a pet store

• Volunteering at an animal shelter

• Caring for family pets

• Working as a veterinarian

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CCSS.L.1.1B

CCSS.L.2.2C

CCSS.L.3.2D

31. Use "Cover Letter" to answer the following question:

42. 43. What change needs to be made in sentence 6?

• A. Change has owned to had owned

• B. Change the comma after rodents to a semicolon

• C. Change I to they

• D. Change caretaker to Caretaker

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CCSS.L.9-10.2A

31. Use "Cover Letter" to answer the following question:

44. 44. What change needs to be made in sentence 14?

• F. Change I know to Knowing

• G. Change are to is

• H. Change passionate to passionite

• J. Change about to for

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CCSS.L.3.1F