Revise and Edit

the little girl was quite excited to go shopping at the mall with her grandmother. 
What change, if any, is needed in the sentence above?

• change the to The

• change quite to quiet

• change grandmother to Grandmother

• no change is needed

Nina is concerned that there is a sentence in the eighth paragraph (sentences 21-25) that does not add anything to this paper. Which sentence should Nina delete from this paragraph?

• Sentence 22

• Sentence 23

• Sentence 24

• Sentence 25

The word because does not appropriately connect the two clauses in sentence 27. Which

word should replace the word because?

• if

• while

• although

• where

Nina has used a poor choice of words in sentence 29. She should change Okay to ̶

• Sure

• Neat

• Proud

• Up

Which transition word or phrase could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 31 to help conclude this story?

• Furthermore

• Later

• In comparison

• Now

What is the correct way to write sentence 3?

• “I’m sorry, Mom,” Barbara replied as she walked slowly into the kitchen.

• “I’m sorry, Mom,” Barbara replied, walked slowly into the kitchen.

• “I’m sorry, Mom,” Barbara replied; walking slowly into the kitchen.

• “I’m sorry, Mom,” Barbara replied as she walked, slowly into the kitchen.

How should sentence 5 be changed?

• Change I to you

• Change weren’t finished to wasn’t finished

• Change my to you

• Sentence 5 should not be changed.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 10?

• Change I to me

• Change are tired to am tired

• Change from to for

• No change should be made in this sentence.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 11?

• Change ones to wons

• Change available to availible

• Change grosery to grocery

• Sentence 11 does not need to be changed.

How should sentence 19 be changed?

• Change know to no

• Change it’s to its

• Change mom to Mom

• No change needs to be made.