Revise and Edit

Which sentence uses commas correctly?

• I went to the store and bought apples, oranges and bananas.

• I went to the store and bought apples, oranges, and, bananas.

• I went to the store, and bought apples oranges and bananas.

• I went to the store and bought apples, oranges, and bananas.

Choose the sentence that is written correctly.

• We went to their house because there hosting a party.

• They're having a party at there house this weekend.

• We went to their house because they're hosting a party.

• There having a party at their house this weekend.

Because Mariah always told them about her day, they were shocked when they didn’t hear from her. Which sentence below provides more clarity?

• Change they to her parents

• Change shocked to surprised

• Change day to it

• Change always to usually

These animals have learned to live among the grasses and flowers of the wide open prairie. The meaning of the sentence is unclear. What could the writer change to improve the clarity of the sentence?

• Change These animals to Coyote, deer, and bison

• Change live to survive

• Change wide to large

• Change among to around

The researchers discovered that the pizza has more nourishment then the hamburger.

What change, if any, needs to be made in the sentence?

• Change then to than

• Change nourishment to norishment

• Change discovered to discover

• No change needs to be made in the sentence

What is the best way to revise the sentences?

• When the breaks stopped working, Thomas lost control.

• Thomas was losing control, and the breaks stopped working.

• The breaks stopped working and this is when Thomas was losing control.

• The breaks stopped working, but Thomas lost control.

What is the best way to revise the sentence?

• The student was presenting and this is when her phone began to ring.

• Presenting is when her phone began to ring.

• During the student’s presentation; her phone began to ring.

• No change is needed

The dessert has hot sand, cactus, and rocks everywhere. 
What change, if any, needs to be made to this sentence?

• delete the comma after cactus

• change everywhere to every  where

• change dessert to desert

• make no change

The teacher was helpfull and showed the student how to work the difficult math problem. 
What change, if any, is needed in the sentence above?

• add a comma before and 

• change helpfull to helpful

• insert a comma after difficult

• no change is needed

Me and my brother went over there because they had lots of different board games to play! 
What change, if any, is needed in the sentence above?

• Change me and my brother to my brother and I

• change lots to lot's

• change there to their

• no change is needed