Editing and Revising Middle School

Find the error in the following sentence.

"Your cousin Juan will be there, and you used to play basketball for hours with them."

• delete the last quotation mark

• change Your to You're

• change them to him

• add a comma after cousin

What change should be made in the following sentence?

She sighed as her father, who was walking toward some older relatives was greeted warmly with big hugs.

• add a comma after relatives

• change sighed to sigh

• change warmly to warm

• change toward to at

What change should be made in the following sentence?

At last Marta captured a glimpse of Juan, who was wearing his terra vista middle school basketball jersey.

• add a comma after Marta

• capitalize Terra Vista

• capitalize Terra Vista Middle School

• capitalize Terra Vista Middle School Basketball Jersey

What is the correct way to write the following sentence (without changing its meaning)?

After becoming registered voters, may people have exercised their right to vote, voted in every election.

• After becoming registered voters, many people have exercised their right to vote in every election.

• Many people have exercised their right to vote. Voted in every election after becoming registered voters.

• After becoming registered voters. Many people have exercised their right to vote in every election.

• Many people have exercised their right to vote, voted in every election, becoming registered voters.

What change, if any, should be made in the following sentence?

Young voters bare responsibility to help select their government officials.

• change government to governmental

• add a comma after voters

• change their to there

• change bare to bear

Greg would like to provide a more effective controlling idea for his paper. Which sentence should replace the following to effectively state the controlling idea? (Remember you don't want to change the meaning.)

Science and a lot of other things are needed to design a fun and working roller coaster.

• Designing an exciting roller-coaster ride involves imagination and creativity, but it also requires using science.

• Quite a bit of knowledge is needed to figure out how the best roller coasters work.

• Roller coasters have to be fun, so the scientists who design and build them must know something about amusement parks.

• Hard work, science, and having lots of other skills are needed to design popular roller coasters.

Greg would like to use a more appropriate word in the following sentence.

Designers take advantage of gravity to generate speed on their ride as cars lower these slopes.

Which word should replace lower in this sentence?

• depart

• extend

• descend

• increase

The following sentence includes repeated information.

Designers aim to set new records with each new roller coaster they design because that is their objective.

Which revision most improves this sentence?

• Designers aim to set new records with each new roller coaster they design.

• Designers have an objective to set new records that they aim for when designing each new roller coaster.

• Designers set new records to aim for them with each new roller-coaster design.

• Designers aim to set new records because that is their objective with each new roller-coaster design.

What change should be made in the following sentence?

"You are going to have a magnificent time, " replies her father.

• delete the comma after time

• change the comma to a question mark

• change replies to replied

• change her to them

What is the correct way to write the following sentence?

He saw Marta, and hesitantly tossed his basketball to her.

• He saw Marta and hesitantly tossed his basketball to her.

• He saw Marta. And hesitantly tossed his basketball to her.

• He saw Marta, hesitantly tossed his basketball to her.

• He saw Marta but he hesitantly tossed his basketball to her.