Revising and Editing

What is the correct way to write sentence 4?What is the correct way to write sentence 4?

• As I watched friends find dates for homecoming, I was initially a little discouraged. Because it looked as though my first homecoming dance would be missing a key character.

• As I watched friends find dates for homecoming, I was initially a little discouraged. It looked as though my first homecoming dance would be missing a key character.

• As I watched friends find dates for homecoming. I was initially a little discouraged because it looked as though my first homecoming dance would be missing a key character.

• Sentence 4 is written correctly.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 7?

• Change that to something

• Change situation to sitaution

• Change High School to high school

• Make no change

What change should be made in sentence 8?

• Change me to I

• Insert a comma after together

• Change decided to decide

• No change should be made.

What change needs to be made in sentence 11?

• Change We girls to Us girls

• Change lot’s to lots

• Change but none to but without none

• No change needs to be made in this sentence.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 18?

• Change one specific to no specific

• Change the comma to a semicolon

• Insert a comma after mingle

• Make no change