Revising and Editing

In sentence 5, the word trip is not the appropriate word to use. Which of the following should replace trip in this sentence?

• standard

• process

• operation

• journey

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CCSS.L.3.1C

Joe would like to replace sentence 8 with a sentence that better articulates the thesis of his paper. Which of the following will accomplish this goal?

• Surfing requires just the right equipment, careful observation of the waves, and the patience to perfect a difficult skill.

• Surfing certainly requires specific materials, identified waves, and various personality traits.

• Surfing requires people who are willing to think about the equipment, the waves, and their own personality traits.

• Surfing requires people who care about the materials used, waves seen, and variety of personality traits represented.

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CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

Joe thinks he may have included an extraneous idea in the second paragraph (sentences 9–16). Which sentence, if any, should he delete from this paragraph?

• Sentence 12

• Sentence 13

• Sentence 15

• No sentence should be deleted from this paragraph.

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CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.1

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 21?

• These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it and patiently wait for the perfect wave.

• These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it because of the perfect wave they patiently wait for.

• These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it, they patiently wait for the perfect wave.

• Sentence 21 does not need to be revised.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 30?

• With more than 500 miles of coastline, people in their home state are offered ample opportunity to surf right here in Texas.

• With more than 500 miles of coastline, Texas offers ample opportunity for people to surf right here in their home state

• With more than 500 miles of coastline, there is ample opportunity for people to surf right here in their home state and in Texas.

• With more than 500 miles of coastline, ample opportunity is offered for people in Texas to surf right here in their home state.

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CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.8.1B

CCSS.L.8.1D

CCSS.L.8.3A