Revising and Editing a Passage

12. What change should be made in sentence 6?

• Insert he was after Cody
• Insert a comma after Cody 
• Change renowned to renownned
• No change should be made. 

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

13. How should sentence 9 be changed? 

• Change noticed to notices 
• Change for to it was for
• Change pony express to Pony Express
• Sentence 9 does not need to be changed. 

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CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

14. What change should be made in sentence 15? 

• Insert a comma after Buntline
• Change made to making 
• Change their to his 
• No change should be made. 

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

15. What change should be made in sentence 17? 

• Change Part to It was part
• Delete the comma
• Change pageant to pagent
• Change Americas’ to America’s

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CCSS.L.1.1B

CCSS.L.2.2C

CCSS.L.3.2D

16. What is the correct way to write sentences 30 and 31?

• When the Wild West Show disbanded just before World War I, it was declared the most successful traveling show of all time.
• The Wild West Show disbanded just before World War I. Having been declared the most successful traveling show of all time. 
• The Wild West Show disbanded just before World War I, at that time it was declared the most successful traveling show of all time.
• The sentences are written correctly in the paper.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

17.  What change should be made in sentence 3? 

• Change years to year’s 
• Change good to well
• Change achieve to acheive 
• No change should be made in sentence 3

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CCSS.L.1.1B

CCSS.L.2.2C

CCSS.L.3.2D

18. What change should be made in sentence 7? 

• Change the comma to a period
• Change set to setted
• Change determined to determinned
• No change should be made in sentence 7

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CCSS.L.1.2B

CCSS.L.5.2

1. What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 3? 

• But it wasn’t often that a news story about a cow was so remarkable that it made national headlines for a week, so the problem-solving skills of people all over the country were engaged. 
• But it wasn’t often that a news story about a cow was so remarkable that when engaged, it made national headlines for a week with the problem-solving skills of people all over the country. 
• But it wasn’t often that a news story about a cow was so remarkable that it made national headlines for a week and engaged the problem-solving skills of people all over the country. 
• No revision is needed in sentence 3.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

2. What is the most effective way to combine sentences 7 and 8? 

• Afterward Grady became upset and ran toward the nearest source of light, probably thinking it was an exit from the barn. 
• Afterward Grady, who became upset and ran toward the nearest source of light, probably thought it was an exit from the barn. 
• Afterward Grady became upset because she probably thought it was an exit from the barn and ran toward the nearest source of light. 
• Afterward Grady became upset and ran toward the nearest source of light, she probably thought it was an exit from the barn.

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CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.5.1E

CCSS.L.7.1B

3. Sentence 12 lacks clarity. What is the best way to improve this sentence? 

•  Change When they to When Mach and the veterinarian 
• Change peered to glanced 
• Change they saw to he saw 
• Change looking out to staring

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CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5