Revising and Editing Details

Damian has not effectively stated the position he is taking in this paper. Which of the following could best replace sentence 7 and provide a stronger position statement for Damian’s paper?

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What is the most effective way to combine sentences 10 and 11? 

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CCSS.L.1.1J

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.7.1B

Damian would like to use a more appropriate transition in sentence 14. Which of the following is the best replacement for Therefore?

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CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 21? 

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CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

The meaning of sentence 23 is unclear. What is the most effective way to clarify the meaning of this sentence?

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CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

Damian needs a stronger closing for his paper. Which sentences should he add after sentence 28 to bring his paper to a more effective conclusion?

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CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

Katy wants to create a more effective thesis statement for her paper. Which of the following could replace sentence 4 and more accurately convey the thesis of this paper?

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Katy’s transition from the second paragraph (sentences 5–9) to the third paragraph (sentences 10–14) is weak. Which of the following could best replace sentence 10 and provide a more effective transition between these two paragraphs?

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.11-12.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

Katy realizes that she left the following detail out of the fourth paragraph (sentences 15–22). While the Youngs had fun decorating their new home, they knew they had to be wise about what they brought into such a small space. Where is the most effective place to insert this sentence?

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CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

Katy wants to use a more appropriate word than questions in sentence 23. Which of these could best replace the word questions?

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CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5