Revise and Edit

Bo wants to insert the following sentence into his paper.

In other words, we need to work to find ways to save water and not waste it.

What is the best place to insert this sentence?

• after sentence 1

• after sentence 2

• after sentence 10

• after sentence 15

What is the best way to combine sentences 3 and 4?

• Though the rest is locked up in ice, it is also found in unusable salt water in our oceans.

• The rest is either locked up in ice or found in unusable salt water in our oceans.

• Since the rest is locked up in ice, it is also found in unusable salt water in our oceans.

• The rest is locked up in ice, so it is also found in unusable salt water in our oceans.

Bo wants to add another supporting sentence to the second paragraph (sentences 7—11). He wants to add the sentence after sentence 9. Which would be the best supporting sentence for this paragraph?

• Rain falls when water droplets in a cloud get too large and heavy to be kept up by the airflow within the cloud.

• There are many different types of house roofs, like hipped roofs, mansard roofs, and gabled roofs.

• Sometimes rain actually evaporates back into clouds before it even hits the ground.

• During an average year, up to two thousand gallons of rain fall on the average-sized roof.

Bo wants to replace sentence 12 with a better topic sentence. Which of these sentences would be the best replacement for sentence 12?

• The water from your roof might contain harmful bacteria, so you should never drink it.

• Rain barrels often have screens over the top to let water in but keep insects out.

• If you install a rain barrel, you can catch rain and use it in many ways.

• The water fro m a rain barrel can be used to moisten clay for art project.

What is the best concluding statement to add to the end of this selection?

• Scientists believe that the human body is between 90 and 94 percent water.

• There are other things you can do to save natural resources, too, like recycling paper.

• Saving water helps us make sure that there is plenty of water for everyone for years to come.

• Water skiing, fishing, and swimming are great ways to enjoy water.

Which sentence should be removed from this selection?

• sentence 6

• sentence 7

• sentence 13

• sentence 14

Piper wants to change sentence 4 to explain how King John used his power. Which word should she add to the end of sentence 4 to explain ho w King John used his power?

• twice

• sadly

• poorly

• quickly

What change, if any, should be made to sentence 8?

• change made to maked

• change subjects to subjects'

• change taxs to taxes

• make no change

What change, if any, should be made to sentence 10?

• change taked to took

• change sums to somes

• change the period after people to a question mark

• make no change

What change, if any, should be made to sentence 15?

• change asked to askt

• change fight to Fight

• insert a comma after French

• make no change