Editing and Revising EOC English

Which of the sentences below is correct?
A.  Jill took Justin and I to the shop.
B.  Jill took Justin and me to the shop.

Here's a hint: Take out the other person, and it should be clearer. Jill took I or Jill took me...

• A
• B
• They are both correct.
• They are both incorrect.

Which sentence uses capital letters correctly?

• I would like to attend the 2018 Olympic Games.
• The 2018 olympic games will be held in South Korea.
• In 2018 the winter olympics will be in south Korea.
• South korea is hosting the next Olympic games.

Which sentence uses it⋅s correctly?
Hint:  When you mean it is or it has, use an apostrophe.   When you are using its as a possessive, don't use the apostrophe.

• It's been a long day already.
• Its been a long day already.
• The cat hurt it's paw.
• Its been great getting to know you.

Which sentence correctly uses the apostrophe to show possession?
Hint: add ' to the end of plural nouns only if they end in -s  like in two cats' toys.

• My childrens' toys are always on the floor.
• My three friends' cars are always clean.
• The four dog's leashes are tangled together.
• The two cat's toys are under the couch.

Which sentence uses correct punctuation?
Hint: Use the semicolon if you have two independent clauses connected without a conjunction.

• I have painted the house, but still need to sand the floors.
• I have painted the house; I still need to sand the floors.
• I painted; and he sanded.
• I have painted the entire house; but she is still working on sanding the floors.

(1) There was once a grand city on the northeast coast of the Mediterranean Sea near Egypt. (2) Known as Thonis to the Egyptians and Heracleion to the Greeks,the metropolis was supposedly one of extraordinary wealth. (3) Some records indicate that Helen of Troy visited the area before the Trojan War. (4) Founded around 700 B.C., it thrived for centuries and then allegedly disappeared into the depths of the ocean. (5) However, because no trace of Thonis-Heracleion had ever been found, it became more of a legend than a reality.
Sentence 4 is unclear, to improve the sentence change it to--

• the famous Trojans
• the historical record
• the magnificent city
• the extreme wealth

One idea is extraneous in this paragraph. Which sentence should be deleted?
(9) Before people can begin riding the waves, they must gather the necessary equipment. (10) A surfboard, which can be selected from a wide range of weights and styles, is needed first. (11) Beginners usually get lighter, more buoyant boards,while experts choose heavier, more maneuverable boards. (12) Next comes surfboard wax, a substance that is rubbed on the board to make it easier to grip.(13) After that, a surfer may want to purchase a surfboard leash, a strap that connects the board to one of the surfer’s ankles. (14) That way the board won’t get lost when the surfer falls off. (15) It takes a lot of practice to get really good at surfing and not fall off. (16) And finally, surfers who plan to swim in cold water will usually want to buy or rent a wet suit to stay warm.

• Sentence 12
• Sentence 13
• Sentence 15
• Sentence 16

What is the best revision for sentence 21?
(18) Figuring out where the best waves are requires both knowledge and experience. (19) That’s because wave conditions change with the tide and weather. (20) Some places, however, are known to be prime surfing spots. (21) These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it and the perfect wave for which they are patiently waiting. 

• Sentence 21 does not need to be revised.
• These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it, they patiently wait for the perfect wave.
• These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it because of the perfect wave they patiently wait for.
• These are called breaks, and when surfers find one, they paddle their surfboards out into it and patiently wait for the perfect wave.

Correct the mistake in this paragraph:
(29) Malala’s story made headlines, and the Taliban’s actions shocked the world. (30) The group had hoped to silence Malala but instead amplifyed her message and created a global hero. (31) In 2013 she became the youngest person ever to be nominated for the Nobel Peace Prize.

• Change Nobel Peace Prize to nobel peace prize
• Change amplifyed to amplified
• Change Malala's to Malalas'
• Insert a comma after Malala

What is the correct way to write sentence 15 and 16?
(13) In January 2009 the Taliban proclaimed that no girl could attend school. (14) Malala and other girls defied this decree, continuing to go to class and study for tests. (15) The 11-year-old also began writing a diary. (16) Which detailed what was happening in her region of Pakistan. (17) The British Broadcasting Corporation soon learned about the diary and helped Malala turn it into an online blog.

• The 11 year old also began writing a diary it detailed what was happening in her region of Pakistan.
• The 11 year old also began writing a diary.  With details about what was happening in her region of Pakistan.
• The 11 year old also began writing a diary that detailed what was happening in her region of Pakistan.
• The sentences in the paragraph are all correct.