English II Revising

1. What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 6?

• A. Even though

• B. In contrast

• C. Furthermore

• D. However

2. Kelly wants to add a more effective transition between the second paragraph and the third paragraph....

• A. Using the snooze button can have a negative impact on person's health.

• B. Perhaps more serious, though, is how this sleepiness can....

• C. Sleepiness also may occur if the body's circadian rhythm, or internal...

• D. Interfering with the natural circadian rhythms is equally distracting.

3. Kelly has not used the most appropriate word in sentence 17. Which word best replaces changes?

• a. varies

• B. shifts

• C. controls

• D. decreases

4. Kelly is considering whether or not she should add the following supporting detail to the fourth paragraph...

• A. After sentence 16

• B. After sentence 17

• C. After sentence 18

• D. Kelly should not add this sentence to the paragraph.

5. Kelly wants to end her essay with a call to action. Which sentence should she add after sentence 21 to best....

• A. The snooze button contributes to unhealthy sleep patterns and should....

• B. Banish the snooze button and develop healthier sleep habits to feel....

• C. Put that alarm on the other side of the room and turn of electonics....

• D. People should stop interrupting sleep cycles with the snooze button...

6. Ken is not satisfied with his thesis statement in sentence 3. Which of the following should replace sentence 3?

• A. The AquaDom in Berlin, Germany, is very tall and made of glass...

• B. For a worthwhile experience, you should go to the AquaDom in Berlin...

• C. The AquaDom in Berling, Germany, is a completely different kind of...

• D. The AquaDom in Berlin Germany, is sort of a different kind of an ...

7. Ken wants to strengthen the topic sentence of his third paragraph. Which of the following best replaces sentence 8?

• A. An elevator is a feature that is popular and transparent in the Aquadom.

• B. The 2,000-ton AquaDom includes features that delight its visitors.

• C. One of the most popular features of the AquaDom is its two-floor...

• D. The AquaDom is so larg that seeing the entire aquarium is difficult.

8. Ken wants to add the following sentence to the third paragraph. Where is the best place to insert this sentence?

• A. After sentence 10

• B. After sentence 11

• C. After sentence 12

• D. After sentence 13

9. What is the most effective way to revise sentence 15?

• A. Visitors are surrounded by fish strolling through the clear shaft on...

• B. Strolling through the clear shaft, visitors are surrounded by fish on...

• C. On their left, on their right, and over their heads, fish are...

• D. Sentence 15 should not be revised.