Revising and Editing

What is the BEST transition to add to the beginning of sentence 15?

(14) But to get a rhino horn, some people ignore this law. (15) The number of rhinos has dropped drastically. (16) In fact, the rhino population has decreased by about 90 percent in the last 40 years.

• In the beginning

• In addition

• As a result

• However

The word bigger is not the right word for sentence 20. Which word should replace bigger in this sentence?

(20) Governments are trying to write bigger laws to protect the rhinos.

• larger

• taller

• stricter

• easier

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 20?

• All the while a regular kid had been thinking about a story.

• All the while he had been thinking of a story about a regular kid.

• All the while he had been thinking about a regular kid and a story.

• All the while he had been thinking of a story it was about a regular kid.

What change, if any, is needed in sentence 5?

(5) Today these ancient ruins served as a home for a type of monkey called the toque macaque.

• change served to serve

• change called to they are called

• change the period to a comma

• No change is needed in sentence 5.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 9?

(9) Temple monkeys are golden brown weight about 10 pounds, and are usually around 17 inches tall.

• Insert a comma after brown

• Change weigh to wiegh

• Change are usually around to were usually around

• No change should be made in sentence 9.

How should sentence 21 be changed?

(21) At night the member's of a family gather in a warm, cozy huddle to sleep.

• change member's to members

• change gather to gathering

• change cozy to cozey

• sentence 21 should not be changed

What change needs to be made in sentence 9?

(9) It is fun to clap your hands in this room, and hear the echo that the ceiling produces.

• change It to And

• change your to you're

• delete the comma

• change produces to produces

What is the correct way to write sentence 11?

• This museum tells the story of Texas. Through three floors of exhibits.

• A museum that tells the story of Texas. Through three floors of exhibits.

• This museum tells the story of Texas through three floors of exhibits.

• The sentence is written correctly in the paper.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 20?

(20) More then a million bats will come out from their home under the bridge and fill the sky.

• change then to than

• change will come to have come

• insert a comma after bridge

• No change needs to be made in this sentence.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 25?

(25) The city is also known for it's lakes, rivers, and natural swimming pools.

• change it's to its

• delete the comma after lakes

• change swimming to swiming

• No change should be made in sentence 25.