Wordiness and Redundancy

I recall how my brother hung about her in the kitchen or wherever she happened to be, how enthusiastically Paul related all his goals for the future, and his intentions for the rest of his life.

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• and his plans for himself.

• and his decisions for his next phase.

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Which of the following words or phrases from the sentence could be deleted?

She worked for thirty years as a teacher and librarian in the field of education in Baltimore public schools.

• thirty

• and librarian

• in the field of education

• Baltimore public

What word or phrase should be deleted?
Becky was late getting home because of a terrible tragedy at work.

• tragedy

• terrible

• at work

• getting

Identify the sentence that avoids unnecessary wordiness.

• At this point in time, we need to make a decision.

• We need to make a decision now.

• We, without a doubt, need to make a decision at this current moment.

• It is necessary that a decision is made by us now.

Which option best revises the following sentence to eliminate redundancy? "The reason Tom is late is because his car broke down."

• The reason Tom is late is due to the fact that his car broke down.

• Tom is late because his car broke down.

• The fact of the matter is, Tom is late because his car broke down.

• Tom's lateness is because his car broke down.

Choose the sentence that is concise and free of redundancy.

• She repeated the same story over and over again.

• She repeated the story repeatedly.

• She told the story again.

• She told the same story multiple times over.

Which of the following sentences eliminates unnecessary wordiness?

• The final outcome of the game was surprising.

• The outcome of the game was surprisingly unexpected.

• The game ended in a surprising outcome.

• The game's outcome was surprising.

Choose the option that revises the sentence to remove redundancy. "The committee will meet together on Wednesday to discuss the issues."

• The committee will meet on Wednesday to discuss the issues.

• The committee will come together on Wednesday to discuss the issues.

• On Wednesday, the committee will meet together to discuss the issues.

• The committee, on Wednesday, will meet to discuss together the issues.

Choose the option that avoids redundancy.

• She saw with her own eyes the painting in the museum.

• She saw the painting in the museum.

• With her own eyes, she saw the painting in the museum.

• She personally saw the painting in the museum with her own eyes.

Which sentence is free from redundancy?

• They climbed up the mountain to get a better view.

• They climbed the mountain to get a better view.

• Up the mountain, they climbed to get a better view.

• They went up and climbed the mountain to get a better view.