Wordiness and Redundancy

Which word or phrase should be deleted?
 In my personal opinion, the lines at the Post Office have grown too long.

• personal

• opinion

• my

• too long

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CCSS.L.11-12.1

CCSS.W.11-12.4

Which word or phrase should be deleted?
The rally attendance was estimated at about one thousand.

• attendance

• was

• estimated

• about

What word or phrase should be deleted?
Becky was late getting home because of a terrible tragedy at work.

• tragedy

• terrible

• at work

• getting

Tags

CCSS.L.11-12.4

CCSS.RL.11-12.4

Which word or phrase should be deleted?
The little people in her diorama are made out of clay

• little

• are made

• out

• of

Tags

CCSS.L.11-12.1

Is this an example of a wordiness? In the near future

• Yes

• No

• English

• Chair

Tags

CCSS.L.11-12.1

CCSS.W.11-12.4

CCSS.W.11-12.5

Define Wordiness...

• a set of words that is complete in itself, typically containing a subject

• using or expressed in too many words

• the state of being not or no longer needed or useful

• is a single word or a group of words that does not qualify as a complete grammatical sentence.

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CCSS.W.11-12.2D

Define Redundancy...

• the state of being not or no longer needed or useful

• a set of words that is complete in itself, typically containing a subject

• using or expressed in too many words

• is a single word or a group of words that does not qualify as a complete grammatical sentence

Tags

CCSS.L.11-12.4

CCSS.RI.11-12.4

He then wrote an enthusiastic article for Strand Magazine, being the place in which most of his Sherlock Holmes stories had first appeared, and later wrote a book on the subject titled The Coming of the Fairies... Improve the highlighted portion.

• NO CHANGE

• in which the magazine where

• in which

• being where

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CCSS.L.11-12.1

CCSS.L.11-12.3

CCSS.W.11-12.4

CCSS.W.11-12.5

Today, Smith's repertoire is so vast that she could speak consecutively for twelve hours straight without running out of material. Improve the highlighted portion.

• NO CHANGE

• Continuously nonstop

• perpetually

• OMIT the underlined portion

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CCSS.L.11-12.1

CCSS.L.11-12.4

CCSS.L.11-12.5

CCSS.L.11-12.6

CCSS.RL.11-12.4

CCSS.W.11-12.2D

CCSS.W.11-12.4

She worked for the thirty years as a teacher and librarian in the field of education in Baltimore public schools. Which of the following words or phrases from the preceding sentence is LEAST necessary and could therefore be deleted?

• thirty

• and librarian

• Baltimore public

• in the field of education