Editing and Revising Sentence Practice

Where should the comma go in the following sentence?
Although I love dogs I would rather have a cat.

• After dogs

• After rather

• No comma needed

Identify the run-on sentence.

• I like learning English it makes me tired.

• I like learning English, but it makes me tired.

• I like learning English, even though it makes me tired.

• I like learning English; it makes me tired.

What is the correct way to write sentence 8?

• F She promised her mother that she would succeed consequently, she walked the four-mile distance daily, between her home and school.

• G She promised her mother that she would succeed consequently she walked the four-mile distance daily between her home and school.

• H She promised her mother that she would succeed. Consequently, she walked; the four-mile distance daily between her home and school.

• J She promised her mother that she would succeed. Consequently, she walked the four-mile distance daily between her home and school.

What transition would be the most appropriate to use at the beginning of sentence 6?

• A As a matter of concern

• B For further evidence

• C To wipe away any doubt

• D For this reason among others

Candice may have a redundant sentence in the fourth paragraph (sentences 22–26). Which sentence, if any, should be deleted?

• F Sentence 24

• G Sentence 25

• H Sentence 26

• J No sentence should be deleted.

Candice would like to improve her concluding sentence by summing up the ideas she has presented. Which sentence should she use to replace sentence 35?

• Finally, we must protect the Great Barrier Reef from being destroyed so future generations can enjoy it.

• How much still remains to be discovered about the Great Barrier Reef of Australia is anybody’s guess.

• Researchers should explore the oceans further to try to find other natural wonders like the Great Barrier Reef.

• Attracting visitors from around the world, the Great Barrier Reef has a beauty that is perhaps unequaled anywhere on Earth.

Melody’s opening sentence is unclear. What change should she make in sentence 1 to clarify her introductory paragraph?

• F Change They to Teachers and leaders at our school

• G Change continually to always

• H Change telling us to instructing us

• J Change community to surrounding neighborhood

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 6 and 7?

• My own sister is having a hard time in math attending one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school.

• My own sister attends one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school although she is having a hard time in math.

• My own sister, who attends one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school, is having a hard time in math.

• My own sister attends one of the elementary schools that feeds into our high school, she is having a hard time in math.

Melody needs a better transition into the third paragraph (sentences 12–17) of her essay. Which of the following could she add before sentence 12 to improve this transition?

• F In researching mentoring programs, I learned of several promising results.

• G As I think about a mentoring program, I have many ideas on how it should work.

• H If struggling youngsters get the help they need, it could benefit teachers, too.

• J Because I believe in the mentoring concept, I’d like to see it at our school.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 4?

• Change benefitial to beneficial

• Insert a comma after people

• Change healthier to healthiest

• No change is needed in sentence 4.