STAAR English I Editing and Revising

Answer the following question based on this paragraph: (1) Everyone has wants and needs that cost money. (2) Some people want the independence that comes with having a car, and some want the latest technology or the newest fashions. (3) Others need to help with the family finances. (4) Working during the school year might sound impossible because of school work and other activities. (5) Additionally, most students have three months without school, during which they could work. (6) Yet, since 1990, the number of teens with summer jobs has steadily declined year after year. (7) This means teens are not earning money for themselves and are not learning important life skills. (8) I plan to get a job this summer. Justine would like to use a more appropriate transition in sentence 5. Which of the following is the best replacement for Additionally?

• Therefore

• For example

• However

• Finally

How should sentence 20 be revised?

• To enhance their surroundings, installing fake windows and decorative drapes helped some people.

• To enhance their surroundings, some people install fake windows and they also use decorative drapes.

• To enhance their surroundings, fake windows with decorative drapes are installed by some people to help them.

• To enhance their surroundings, some people install fake windows with decorative drapes.

On the day that he was supposed to paddle over Niagara Falls, he went to the top and looked down, he said that things just didn’t feel right.

• On the day that he was supposed to paddle over Niagara Falls. He went to the top, looked down, and said that things just didn’t feel right.

• On the day that he was supposed to paddle over Niagara Falls, he went to the top and looked down. He said that things just didn’t feel right.

• On the day that he was supposed to paddle over Niagara Falls, he went to the top and looked down. And said that things just didn’t feel right.

• On the day that he was supposed to paddle. Over Niagara falls, he went to the top, looked down, and said things just didn’t feel right.

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 3 and 4?

• But online networking, which is very popular with teens today, promotes short, superficial connections.

• But online networking promotes short, superficial connections, it is very popular with teens today.

• But online networking that promotes short, superficial connections, it is very popular with teens today.

• But online networking promotes short, superficial connections with teens today, which it is very popular.

How can Susan improve the clarity of sentence 12?

• Change these teens to they

• Change they to researchers

• Change suggesting to saying

• Change a while to some time

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 16?

• Everyone communicates in person in one way, they communicate in different ways over the phone, through texting, or in online posts.

• Everyone communicates differently in person than they do when speaking over the phone, sending texts, or writing online posts.

• Everyone communicates in person differently than they do over the phone, to send texts, or posting online.

• Everyone communicates in person, over the phone, through texting, or in online posts differently.

As students explore texts that were written hundreds of years before, you peer through a window into the world as it was in those days.

How should sentence 5 be changed?

• Change explore to explored

• Change were written to was written

• Change years to year’s

• Change you to they

Being able to hear those voices from the past is a privilage young people should be grateful to have.

What change should be made in sentence 9?

• Insert a comma after past

• Change is to are

• Change privilage to privilege

• Change grateful to gratefull

Most teens are absorbed with their own daily activities, they rarely think about the fact that human civilization has been around for a long time. What is the correct way to write sentence 11?

• Most teens are absorbed with their own daily activities. Rarely thinking about the fact that human civilization has been around for a long time.

• Most teens are absorbed with their own daily activities and rarely think about human civilization. Which has been around for a long time.

• Most teens are absorbed with their own daily activities and rarely think about this fact, human civilization has been around for a long time.

• Most teens are absorbed with their own daily activities and rarely think about the fact that human civilization has been around for a long time.

According to Philip Davis one of the English professors involved in the study, “Serious literature acts like a rocket-booster to the brain.” How should sentence 23 be changed?

• Change According to Acording

• Insert a comma after Davis

• Change Serious to serious

• Sentence 23 should not be changed.