Revision Adding Sentences

Match the sentences

7- ____

Match the sentences

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To show an addition (more information), use a transition like:

• obviously, clearly, evidently

• as a result, because, since, so

• besides, for example, furthermore

• but, yet, although, though

The following sentence pair can be revised into one better sentence.Choose the sentence that is the best revision.

The clown is funny.The clown is in the car.

• The clown is in the car,and the clown is funny.

• The clown is funny and is in the car.

• In the car,the clown there is funny.

• The clown in the car is funny.

Sierra would like to add a sentence to bring her story to a more effective close. Which
sentence could she add after this sentence: 
He pawed one hoof, bobbed his head, and stood tall, fit, and proud.

• As the son of Zeus and Diamond, Dudley was proud of his heritage.

• The plain little colt had finally become the horse he had been bred to be.

• He was ready to move back to the McGee ranch and be with his family again.

• Dudley would never be the horse that people had hoped for, but he was still special.

Adding and cutting details; making sure your writing is clear and achieves its purpose.

• Revising

• Editing

• Prewriting

• Drafting

You cut, add, change, and rearrange details during...

• Editing

• Publishing

• Revision

• Prewriting

Which is the 3rd step in the writing process?

• Drafting

• Revising

• Editing

• Publishing

To show an addition (more information), use a transition like:

• A) obviously, clearly, evidently

• B) as a result, because, since, so

• C) besides, for example, furthermore

• D) but, yet, although, though

The following sentence pair can be revised into one better sentence. Choose the sentence that is the best revision. The clown is funny. The clown is in the car.

• A) The clown is in the car, and the clown is funny.

• B) The clown is funny and is in the car.

• C) In the car, the clown there is funny.

• D) The clown in the car is funny.