Revise and Edit Questions

Revise this: The forest was very beautiful.

• The forest was enchanting.

• The forest made me very happy.

• Redwoods stretched from the dense, green foliage into the blue sky.

• The forest was big and majestic. There were trees everywhere.

He later explained that he just wasn’t confident he would be able to land the kayak safe.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 27?

• Change explained to explains

• Change confident to confidant

• Change safe to safely

• No change needs to be made in this sentence.

Dan and his wife Lisa have invented a new way of celebrating thanksgiving.

• Change Dan to dan

• Change invented to inventing

• Change celebrating to celabrating

• Change thanksgiving to Thanksgiving.

Memorial Day officially began in May 1868, when we honored Civil War soldiers at Arlington National Cemetary by putting flowers on there graves.

• Change graves to grave

• Change there to they're

• Change there to their

• Change putting to put

Looking for her dog, the shelter is where she went. What is the most effective revision to make in the sentence?

• A. Looking for her dog, the young girl went into the shelter.

• B. She looked for her dog, she went into the shelter.

• C. Looking for her dog was when she went into the shelter.

• D. No revision needed in the sentence.

“Take care of him” said Pete’s owner. What change, if any, needs to be made in the sentence?

• A. Insert a comma after him

• B. Change Pete’s to Petes’

• C. Insert quotation marks after the period

• D. No change needs to be made in this sentence

What is the best way to combine the sentences?

• She was one of the most famous activists of all time, she started three movements

• She was one of the most famous activists of all time; however, she started three movements.

• Anna Marie, one of the most famous activists of all time, started three movements.

• Although Anna Marie was one of the most famous activists of all time, she started three movements.

What is the best way to revise the sentences?

• When the breaks stopped working, Thomas lost control.

• Thomas was losing control, and the breaks stopped working.

• The breaks stopped working and this is when Thomas was losing control.

• The breaks stopped working, but Thomas lost control.

What is the MOST effective way to combine these two sentences?

• Playing a team sport is one way to get this exercise, so not every kid wants to join a team.

• Playing a team sport is one way to get this exercise, but not every kid wants to join a team.

• Not every kid wants to join a team, also playing a team sport is one way to get this exercise.

• Because playing a team sport is one way to get this exercise, not every kid wants to join a team.

It is not the aim to set up a new organization to parallel in it's purposes others already established. Editing: Use the passage above to answer the following questions. What change should be made to sentence 2?

• Add a comma after organization

• Change it's to its

• Change others to other's

• Make no change