Narrative Writing Revising and Editing

Revise this: The forest was very beautiful.

• The forest was enchanting.

• The forest made me very happy.

• Redwoods stretched from the dense, green foliage into the blue sky.

• The forest was big and majestic. There were trees everywhere.

Revise this: She thought the roller coaster was intense.

• The wind swept her air and her eyes began to tear as she hurdled towards the loop.

• The Incredicoaster is an intense roller coaster.

• The roller coaster was scary!

• The loop on the Incredicoaster scared her.

Revise this: He was so angry.

• I had never seen him so angry.

• He had an furious and dangerous look on his face as he raged around the room.

• He shouted, cursed and hit the table.

• His brow furrowed and his veins popped. He slammed his fist onto the table.

Edit this: "I want pizza," she says.

• "I want pizza," she claims.

• "I want pizza," she shouts.

• "I want pizza," she said.

• "I want pizza," she explains.

Edit this: "The storm is approaching" he whispered.

• "The storm is approaching." he whispers,

• "The storm is approaching," he whispered.

• "The storm is approaching," he whispers.

• The storm is approaching, he whispers,

Which typeface should you write characters' thoughts in?

• Normal Typeface

• Bold

• Underline

• Italics

Which punctuation mark goes around dialogue?

• ,Commas,

• "Quotation Marks"

• 'Apostrophes'

• ;Semi-Colons;

What punctuation mark goes at the end of most dialogue before the quotation mark?

• "Colons:"

• "Semi-Colons;"

• "Commas,"

• "Dashes-"

Which dialogue is formatted correctly?

• "Is it this one?" they wondered.

• "Is it this one" they wondered.

• "Is it this one" they wondered."

• Is it this one? they wondered.

Which of the following is a "showing" detail?

• It was fall.

• It was August.

• Leaves crunched beneath his feet.

• It was pretty out.