STAAR Revising/Editing

In September of 1921, Coleman, whom was now a proficient pilot, came back to the United States. What change should Gena make in sentence 17?

• Insert a comma after September

• Change whom to who

• Change proficient to proficiant

• Change came to comes

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 25?

• Insert a comma after performance

• Change the comma after 1926 to a semicolon

• Change mechanical to machanical

• No change should be made

How does sentence 28 need to be changed?

• Change Similar to Similarly

• Change female to females

• Change started to would start

• Insert a comma after Club

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 3 and 4?

• But online networking, which is very popular with teens today, promotes short, superficial connections.

• But online networking promotes short, superficial connections, it is very popular with teens today.

• But online networking that promotes short, superficial connections, it is very popular with teens today.

• But online networking promotes short, superficial connections with teens today, which it is very popular.

Everyone communicates in person differently than communicating over the phone, through texting, or in online posts. What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 16?

• Everyone communicates in person in one way, they communicate in different ways over the phone, through texting, or in online posts.

• Everyone communicates differently in person than they do when speaking over the phone, sending texts, or writing online posts.

• Everyone communicates in person differently than they do over the phone, to send texts, or posting online.

• Everyone communicates in person, over the phone, through texting, or in online posts differently.

To enhance their surroundings, fake windows with decorative drapes are installed by some people. How should sentence 20 be revised?

• To enhance their surroundings, installing fake windows and decorative drapes helped some people.

• To enhance their surroundings, some people install fake windows and they also use decorative drapes.

• To enhance their surroundings, fake windows with decorative drapes are installed by some people to help them.

• To enhance their surroundings, some people install fake windows with decorative drapes.

How should sentence 5 be changed?

• Change explore to explored

• Change were written to was written

• Change years to year’s

• Change you to they

Being able to hear those voices from the past is a privilage young people should be grateful to have.

What change should be made in sentence 9?

• Insert a comma after past

• Change is to are

• Change privilage to privilege

• Change grateful to gratefull

According to Philip Davis one of the English professors involved in the study, “Serious literature acts like a rocket-booster to the brain.” How should sentence 23 be changed?

• Change According to Acording

• Insert a comma after Davis

• Change Serious to serious

• Sentence 23 should not be changed.

With no instructions or guidence, Ortiz and his sister planned to take their new boats out onto the water. What change should be made in sentence 6?

• Change With to Without

• Change guidence to guidance

• Delete the comma

• Change planned to planning