Revise Writing

Choose the best revision for clarity: "The cat sat on the mat because it was warm and sunny."

• The cat sat on the mat because it was sunny and warm.

• The cat sat on the mat, which was warm and sunny.

• Because it was warm and sunny, the cat sat on the mat.

• The mat was warm and sunny, so the cat sat on it.

Choose the best revision for clarity: "The teacher explained the lesson, and the students understood it well."

• The teacher explained the lesson well, and the students understood it.

• The students understood the lesson because the teacher explained it well.

• The lesson was explained by the teacher, and the students understood it.

• The teacher explained the lesson, which the students understood well.

Choose the best revision for clarity: "The dog barked loudly, and the neighbors complained."

• The neighbors complained because the dog barked loudly.

• The dog barked loudly, which made the neighbors complain.

• The neighbors complained about the loud barking of the dog.

• The dog barked, and the neighbors complained loudly.

How should sentence 1 be changed?

• Change officials to officails

• Change will be voting to have been voting

• Change choose to chose

• Change middle school to Middle School

What change should be made to sentence 6?

• Move in icy water after middle

• Change so to even though

• Insert a comma after winter

• Insert a comma after them

What is the correct way to write sentence 7?

• Beavers are also loyal and territorial; in fact, they protect their lodges and families in a way that is similar to how we protect our school and teammates.

• Beavers are also loyal, territorial, protecting their lodges, and families in a way that is similar to how we protect our school and teammates.

• Beavers also are loyal, territorial, and they protect their lodges and families in a way that is similar to how we protect our school and teammates.

• Beavers are loyal and territorial; also, protecting their lodges and families in a way that is similar to how we protect our school and teammates.

What is the BEST way to write sentence 9?

• In addition, we all know that beavers are industrious, and hardworking.

• In addition, we all know that beavers are industrious, or hardworking.

• In addition, we all know that beavers are industrious or hardworking.

• The sentence is written correctly in the paper.

How does sentence 20 need to be changed?

• Change believe to beleive

• Change be to have been

• Delete the comma

• Insert a colon after this

Choose the best revision for clarity: "The writer revised the draft to improve its coherence."

• A) The writer revised the draft, which improved its coherence.

• B) To improve its coherence, the writer revised the draft.

• C) The draft was revised by the writer to improve its coherence.

• D) The writer revised the draft for improving its coherence.

Choose the best revision for clarity: "The editor suggested changes, and the author accepted them."

• A) The author accepted the changes suggested by the editor.

• B) The editor suggested changes, which the author accepted.

• C) The editor suggested changes, and they were accepted by the author.

• D) The author accepted them because the editor suggested changes.