STAAR Edit and Revise

Jamie would like to add a sentence to the beginning of the selection below to introduce the ideas in her paragraph. (1) During the house training process, you will need to make sure the puppy knows where it should go to the restroom. (2) Be sure to take your puppy out often and expose him to the grass or surface that you will want him to use. (3) Also, don't punish your puppy for having accidents inside the house. (4) Instead, reward and praise him when he goes outside. (5) This will encourage positive behavior from your canine. Which of the following would be the BEST sentence to add just before sentence 1?

• Of the many tasks involved with training a dog, house training is probably the most difficult.

• There are many difficult training techniques to use with young puppies.

• Be sure to leave out food and water for your puppy every day.

What is the BEST way to combine the sentences below? (1) Julio learned how to ride his bike without training wheels. (2) He rides his bike without any help.

• Julio learned how to ride his bike without training wheels after he rides without any help.

• Julio learned how to ride his bike without training wheels, he would now ride without any help.

• Julio learned how to ride his bike without training wheels, and he rides without any help.

What is the BEST way to revise the sentence below? One day, Luke decided that into the woods he would drive his 4-wheeler.

• One day, Luke decided to drive his 4-wheeler, he would drive into the woods.

• One day, Luke decided to drive his 4-wheeler into the woods.

• One day, Luke decided that he would drive his 4-wheeler where he could drive into the woods.

Amy realizes that there is a sentence in the paragraph below that does not belong. Which sentence should Aimee delete from this paragraph? (1) Charlie knew that to catch fish, he needed three important items: a pole, a hook, and some bait. (2) He now fishes in Lake Sam Rayburn. (3) Charlie makes sure to have a variety of bait. (4) The type he uses depends on the type of fish he plans to catch. (5) Also, he always brings plenty of small and large hooks. (6) Sometimes, he may lose a hook, or a fish may break his line. (7) Many times, he needs an extra one.

• Sentence 2

• Sentence 5

• Sentence 7

What are the directions asking you to do?

• Revise

• Edit

• Write to a prompt

What change should be made in sentence 31?

• Change We to Because we

• Insert a comma after surprised

• Change became to become

• Sentence 31 should not be changed.

Read the paragraph below and answer the question that follows. (1) I knew Aunt Cathy was coming for a visit tomorrow. (2) I could tell Mom was stressed about it because she hadn't had time to clean house or get prepared. (3) During the night, I decided to get up and clean the entire house from top to bottom. (4) When Mom woke up, she was shocked! (5) Mom had tears in her eyes. (6) She hugged and kissed me. What is the BEST way to combine sentences 5 and 6?

• She hugged me and she kissed me with tears in her eyes.

• Mom had tears in her eyes as she hugged and kissed me.

• She was hugging and kissing me which she had tears in her eyes.

What is the BEST way to revise the sentence below? Collette was struggling to change the tire, the policeman decided to help change it with her.

• Having trouble changing the tire, the policeman decided and helped Collette.

• Collette was struggling to change the tire, so the policeman decided to help her.

• The policeman decided to help Collette having trouble changing the tire.

The word contained is not the right word for sentence 3.

Read the paragraph below and answer the question that follows.

(1) Last night, my family and I went to eat pizza. (2) The aroma was heavenly, and my mouth began to water. (3) The pizza was contained with pepperonis, black olives, onions, and peppers all over it. (4) I couldn't wait to take the first bite!

Which word would better help describe the top of the pizza?

• included

• covered

• wrapped

The meaning of sentence 4 is unclear. Read the paragraph below and answer the question that follows. (1) Bradley has always loved to make model airplanes. (2) At first, it wasn't easy to learn how to assemble them. (3) He had to carefully put together the wings, propeller, and body of the aircraft so it would fly properly. (4) Bradley used to get frustrated when they would break. The sentence can be improved by changing they to-

• the stuff he worked on

• items and things

• his models