Practice, Revise, and Edit Review

What is the best way to revise the sentence?

• The student was presenting and this is when her phone began to ring.

• Presenting is when her phone began to ring.

• During the student’s presentation; her phone began to ring.

• No change is needed

What change, if any, needs to be made in the sentence?

• Insert a comma before and

• Change watched to watch

• Change ruined to runed

• Insert a comma after movie

Me and my brother went over there because they had lots of different board games to play! 
What change, if any, is needed in the sentence above?

• Change me and my brother to my brother and I

• change lots to lot's

• change there to their

• no change is needed

What is the correct way to write the sentence above?

• 20 million people visit Disney World almost each year. 

• Almost 20 million people visit Disney World each year. 

• 20 million people visit Disney World each year, almost. 

• No change is needed

We've got to go quickly, said his mother.
What change, if any, is needed in the sentence above?

• change we've to we'll

• change quickly to quick

• insert quotation marks after quickly

• no change is needed

Nina is concerned that there is a sentence in the eighth paragraph (sentences 21-25) that does not add anything to this paper. Which sentence should Nina delete from this paragraph?

• Sentence 22

• Sentence 23

• Sentence 24

• Sentence 25

Nina has used a poor choice of words in sentence 29. She should change Okay to ̶

• Sure

• Neat

• Proud

• Up

What is the correct way to write sentence 3?

• “I’m sorry, Mom,” Barbara replied as she walked slowly into the kitchen.

• “I’m sorry, Mom,” Barbara replied, walked slowly into the kitchen.

• “I’m sorry, Mom,” Barbara replied; walking slowly into the kitchen.

• “I’m sorry, Mom,” Barbara replied as she walked, slowly into the kitchen.

How should sentence 5 be changed?

• Change I to you

• Change weren’t finished to wasn’t finished

• Change my to you

• Sentence 5 should not be changed.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 10?

• Change I to me

• Change are tired to am tired

• Change from to for

• No change should be made in this sentence.